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15-Minute Wait for the Results This piece has been published in Teen Ink's monthly print magazine.

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By Emily B., New Market, MD
Skinny bird legs lying next to mine.
The one rubbing my thigh is tapping
up and down and up and down
because you are nervous about something.
Your
Photo credit: Shannon E., Glendale, AZ
finger, the one with the big red plastic ring,
is tapping on the peeling dark veneer rhythmically.
Tap-a-tap-a-tap-tap-tap-tap-a-tap
Your other hand is so clammy.
Like a turtleneck on a hot day,
like a wet turtleneck on a humid day.
The salmon-colored plastic sticks to my upper arm
in the small space between us on this love seat,
peeling away from my skin when I shift
with a sticky sound. Ouch.
There’s a rip, all jagged with
school bus-colored foam poking out.
Your nails are digging in,
as short as they are.
You are so afraid.
My nails are digging into your hand as well –
I can see the red-lined moons standing out plain as sight.
What was that old saying?
Red sky at night, sailor’s delight?
Or was it take warning?
Does a moon make the night red?
I ask you out loud, you laugh,
this queer little laugh
that isn’t a laugh at all.
Not really.
And you say it’s the first.
So we should delight and dance together like
we were doing just last week under that
tacky disco ball.
The door opens with a creak that reminds me
of an old haunted house. It’s all meant to scare.
The doctor walks in – shuffles really – lab coat knocking against his knees.
He’s kind-looking and old. Like a grandfather. Or uncle. Or something.
He moves past us.
Sits at his desk.
Pulls on his glasses – his eyes look so big.
Pulls out a manila folder.
Opens it.
Turns the page. Again. Again.
Licks his lips.
Takes glasses off – his eyes are small once more.
His chin rests on his folded hands.
Pensive.
“The test was positive.”
Your grip tightens, my grip tightens.
Many red moons across our hands.
This piece has been published in Teen Ink's monthly print magazine.This piece has also been published in Teen Ink's monthly print magazine.

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Penelope said...
Mar. 7 at 7:00 pm:

I thought this was really good!!! I love your style keep writing!

 
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DHgirl said...
Mar. 7 at 5:34 pm:

to me this is okay. it needs work.

 
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babigerl1194 said...
Mar. 7 at 4:20 pm:

i got goosebumps and i loved te style and the way u dragged it out but kept our interest.. amazingg

 
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loveydoveycool9 said...
Mar. 7 at 3:11 pm:

can anyone read my story "The Screams of a silent Girl"

 
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HaHmAh12 said...
Mar. 7 at 12:55 pm:

this is gorgeous. i love our descriptions and color! ahh!! i can almost see/feel it!! such a different take on this subject. awesome!

 
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alwayswriting14 said...
Mar. 7 at 8:38 am:

Simply amazing. You are a wonderful desrciptive writer.

 
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Fireflie said...
Feb. 13 at 6:04 pm:

simply amazing...descriptions were ingenious...i love you're style.

 
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Aimee05 said...
Feb. 13 at 5:20 pm:

that was just amazing, and so relateable!! great jod

 
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Dandelion said...
Feb. 13 at 1:50 pm:

This was just fabulous! Oh, what is it? What is the test? The question burns inside me, yet I know it's the thing that makes this poem so great.

 
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DallysGrrl said...
Feb. 13 at 10:15 am:

Great job!!

 
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SharpestSatire said...
Jan. 22 at 9:17 pm:

Wow. Really amazing. Keep it up! I hope this isn't written from experience...? Since it certainly seems like an unwanted pregnancy ... Anyway, loved it!

 
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sleeplessdreamer said...
Jan. 22 at 8:24 pm:

Really great. I was really impressed. You have magnificent descriptions.

 
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Alcinous~the~XIIth said...
Jan. 22 at 7:10 pm:

I love how you can't even tell whether or not the couple wanted to get pregnant ...Ambiguity = good writing :)

 
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live&create16 said...
Jan. 22 at 7:01 pm:

i really like this! you're really good with your descriptions!

 
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Emely J. said...
Dec. 31, 2009 at 9:22 pm:

This is absolutlely amazing! You have a great talent.

 
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Transatlantic said...
Dec. 31, 2009 at 3:20 pm:

This is really good, and I love your decriptions. Your writing style is really nifty. And while the ending is clearly open-ended, I think it's perfect that way.

 
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wArm_FuZzies said...
Dec. 31, 2009 at 9:23 am:

I love all the description, but at the same time you made it so mysterious. My guess is that you're talking about pregnancy . Yes or no?

 
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gueydangirl said...
Dec. 10, 2009 at 3:57 pm:

Wow. That was really good. I can tell that your talken about pregnecy.

 
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sunsetfire94 said...
Dec. 9, 2009 at 8:32 pm:

Wow I loved the description and imagery in here. it was kinda like a poem, but i see that the way you put it together makes it mysterious. i definitely felt the tension in it. But I have to admit I didn't quite understand it. More details would have been better, but otherwise, it was awesome! :)

 
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mandygale77 said...
Dec. 9, 2009 at 7:20 pm:

I think it's really good! You keep it uncertain until the end, which is a little uncertain as well to lead us to our own conclusion - I'm thinking pregnancy personally. I like the style too!

 
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Andrnick said...
Dec. 9, 2009 at 6:56 pm:

Well, Sorry to put it this way but it's the worst story on this website.
Sorry.....Bad description....I'd consider this as a poetry but overall it isn't the creative bliss I'd expect from a writer like you.

 
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NsCvIuS said...
Dec. 9, 2009 at 6:21 pm:

Well, that was rather ambigious...

 
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guitarchick said...
Dec. 9, 2009 at 9:12 am:

good article but whats happening? What kind of test is it?

 
~*el-oh-vee-ee*~ replied...
Dec. 9, 2009 at 12:44 pm :

i'm guessing it was a pregnancy test? maybe? or an std ? but you know what. this was really good. you have talent!

 
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Sarah B. said...
Nov. 17, 2009 at 10:04 pm:

i liked it it was good but i didnt really get a feel of wat was going on sorry

 
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Nanna said...
Nov. 17, 2009 at 10:02 pm:

Wow I love your detail. Amazing! The title was capturing, and made the reader want to find out what was going on. Please never stop writing.

 
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jmc.13 said...
Nov. 17, 2009 at 8:19 pm:

I loved this piece. The suspense was fantastic. You set the scene perfectly and the language was extremely meaningful.
Please, as a service to us all, keep writing.

 
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evie_girl_novelette445 said...
Nov. 17, 2009 at 6:00 pm:

Wow great description . . . !! Just wish there was more detail! :)

 
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sasssgirrrl22 said...
Nov. 17, 2009 at 5:22 pm:

I love ur descriptions!!! This is gr8 keep it up!!

 
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firstsnowfalls said...
Nov. 17, 2009 at 3:58 pm:

This is wonderful! I think the lack of detail makes it even more intriguing and powerful. Great job!

 
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Jaquie said...
Nov. 17, 2009 at 3:36 pm:

Incredible. I love this... It has a pensive feel but is still totally understandable. Fabulous job.
God bless,
...,

 
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monongah fetty#21 said...
Nov. 17, 2009 at 10:31 am:

this story was great. but it needs more detail. what was the test on?

 
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<3::wish4wings::<3 said...
Nov. 17, 2009 at 9:52 am:

this was soo good:D great work

 
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Cat_Art101 said...
Oct. 26, 2009 at 8:01 pm:

This was really amazing. I could feel the tension building, and I really like the part in the middle where you released it for just a second. That was genious. In response to everyone wondering what it was a test for, I personally think that is was for  pregnancy  (as do many others here, I can see), and I think that the part about dancing under a tacky disco ball kind of elaborates on that. But I love the ... (more »)

 
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imaginewhirrledpeas said...
Oct. 26, 2009 at 7:11 pm:

this is amazing! very descriptive!! i really loved it :) it is one of my favorites now. and i like how it could be any type of disease

 
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TheseEyesThatSeeTheWorld said...
Oct. 26, 2009 at 6:30 pm:

I really like it!

 
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said...
Oct. 26, 2009 at 9:38 am:

Very well written. Is it a pregnancy test?

 
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RLJoy said...
Oct. 18, 2009 at 8:07 pm:

this is written so well!!!!! I really liked it. I also really like your description. Keep writing

 
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nataliew32 said...
Oct. 4, 2009 at 11:35 pm:

I loved it, it was really descriptive! I like how you left what was positive to the reader, it could be anything from  pregnancy  to cancer. It's suspensful, even at the end. :) i liked it.

 
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kinki-gelinki said...
Oct. 4, 2009 at 9:51 pm:

im pretty sure its that shes  pregnant ...thats what seems most likely cause there a young couple at the doecters and there real nerv racked, thats what i think

 
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soccerstar108 said...
Oct. 4, 2009 at 9:27 pm:

that was really good. but what was positive. it was really well written :) good job!!! keep writing

 
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hoofanna said...
Oct. 4, 2009 at 8:35 pm:

Wow this was amazing!
Am I thinking right when I thought the test might have been a  pregnancy  test? Either way very well written!

 
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SarahG said...
Oct. 4, 2009 at 6:49 pm:

 Pregnancy ? maybe.
i loved it.

 
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RLJoy said...
Oct. 4, 2009 at 5:58 pm:

amazing!!!!!! It was very well written.

 
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writingkate said...
Oct. 4, 2009 at 2:55 pm:

Very ggod. I am also wondering what was positve. Extremely creative. Nice!

 
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HopelessRomantic said...
Apr. 22, 2009 at 12:36 am:

Amazing! Really like this piece!

 
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Katy Hollingsworth said...
Apr. 21, 2009 at 9:32 pm:

Amazing!!!! but I to am left in suspence.
And we are all waiting just like in your poem!!!!
-Katy

 
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Miranda M. said...
Apr. 16, 2009 at 1:04 am:

soo good i love it i can see it you need to leep writing!!

 
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brit brit said...
Apr. 15, 2009 at 10:58 pm:

that was amazing! I love it-especially how you kept the readers in suspense! keep it up! :)

 
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babybunny said...
Apr. 15, 2009 at 7:42 pm:

it was very good like evryone else im wondering what was positive but its ok not knowing because like evryone else said thats what makes it great

 
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