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15-Minute Wait for the Results This piece has been published in Teen Ink's monthly print magazine.

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By Emily B., New Market, MD
Skinny bird legs lying next to mine.
The one rubbing my thigh is tapping
up and down and up and down
because you are nervous about something.
Your
Photo credit: Shannon E., Glendale, AZ
finger, the one with the big red plastic ring,
is tapping on the peeling dark veneer rhythmically.
Tap-a-tap-a-tap-tap-tap-tap-a-tap
Your other hand is so clammy.
Like a turtleneck on a hot day,
like a wet turtleneck on a humid day.
The salmon-colored plastic sticks to my upper arm
in the small space between us on this love seat,
peeling away from my skin when I shift
with a sticky sound. Ouch.
There’s a rip, all jagged with
school bus-colored foam poking out.
Your nails are digging in,
as short as they are.
You are so afraid.
My nails are digging into your hand as well –
I can see the red-lined moons standing out plain as sight.
What was that old saying?
Red sky at night, sailor’s delight?
Or was it take warning?
Does a moon make the night red?
I ask you out loud, you laugh,
this queer little laugh
that isn’t a laugh at all.
Not really.
And you say it’s the first.
So we should delight and dance together like
we were doing just last week under that
tacky disco ball.
The door opens with a creak that reminds me
of an old haunted house. It’s all meant to scare.
The doctor walks in – shuffles really – lab coat knocking against his knees.
He’s kind-looking and old. Like a grandfather. Or uncle. Or something.
He moves past us.
Sits at his desk.
Pulls on his glasses – his eyes look so big.
Pulls out a manila folder.
Opens it.
Turns the page. Again. Again.
Licks his lips.
Takes glasses off – his eyes are small once more.
His chin rests on his folded hands.
Pensive.
“The test was positive.”
Your grip tightens, my grip tightens.
Many red moons across our hands.
This piece has been published in Teen Ink's monthly print magazine.This piece has also been published in Teen Ink's monthly print magazine.

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Cat_Art101 said...
Oct. 26 at 8:01 pm:

This was really amazing. I could feel the tension building, and I really like the part in the middle where you released it for just a second. That was genious. In response to everyone wondering what it was a test for, I personally think that is was for  pregnancy  (as do many others here, I can see), and I think that the part about dancing under a tacky disco ball kind of elaborates on that. But I love the ... (more »)

 
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imaginewhirrledpeas said...
Oct. 26 at 7:11 pm:

this is amazing! very descriptive!! i really loved it :) it is one of my favorites now. and i like how it could be any type of disease

 
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TheseEyesThatSeeTheWorld said...
Oct. 26 at 6:30 pm:

I really like it!

 
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said...
Oct. 26 at 9:38 am:

Very well written. Is it a pregnancy test?

 
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RLJoy said...
Oct. 18 at 8:07 pm:

this is written so well!!!!! I really liked it. I also really like your description. Keep writing

 
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nataliew32 said...
Oct. 4 at 11:35 pm:

I loved it, it was really descriptive! I like how you left what was positive to the reader, it could be anything from  pregnancy  to cancer. It's suspensful, even at the end. :) i liked it.

 
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kinki-gelinki said...
Oct. 4 at 9:51 pm:

im pretty sure its that shes  pregnant ...thats what seems most likely cause there a young couple at the doecters and there real nerv racked, thats what i think

 
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soccerstar108 said...
Oct. 4 at 9:27 pm:

that was really good. but what was positive. it was really well written :) good job!!! keep writing

 
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hoofanna said...
Oct. 4 at 8:35 pm:

Wow this was amazing!
Am I thinking right when I thought the test might have been a  pregnancy  test? Either way very well written!

 
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SarahG said...
Oct. 4 at 6:49 pm:

 Pregnancy ? maybe.
i loved it.

 
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RLJoy said...
Oct. 4 at 5:58 pm:

amazing!!!!!! It was very well written.

 
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writingkate said...
Oct. 4 at 2:55 pm:

Very ggod. I am also wondering what was positve. Extremely creative. Nice!

 
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HopelessRomantic said...
Apr. 22 at 12:36 am:

Amazing! Really like this piece!

 
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Katy Hollingsworth said...
Apr. 21 at 9:32 pm:

Amazing!!!! but I to am left in suspence.
And we are all waiting just like in your poem!!!!
-Katy

 
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Miranda M. said...
Apr. 16 at 1:04 am:

soo good i love it i can see it you need to leep writing!!

 
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brit brit said...
Apr. 15 at 10:58 pm:

that was amazing! I love it-especially how you kept the readers in suspense! keep it up! :)

 
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babybunny said...
Apr. 15 at 7:42 pm:

it was very good like evryone else im wondering what was positive but its ok not knowing because like evryone else said thats what makes it great

 
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tinkerbell said...
Apr. 15 at 6:14 pm:

very nice nd suspensful! evn tho the point was not to knw wat the test was about, i still wish it was included. does tht mean ur story serves ur purpose? idk lol still really great!

 
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Tootziee said...
Apr. 15 at 5:46 pm:

loved it.♥

 
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xcblue44x said...
Apr. 15 at 1:03 pm:

This is really good. It's like one of those books where you feel like you're in the story. Really, really good. Keep writing.

 
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annkaykay2011 said...
Apr. 10 at 2:22 am:

Very good. I love the tension in the beginning, then the climax to the end which is covered in tension all over again. It sounds like a teenage girl and her bf hearing their worst fear but then in a way glad it was all over with.

 
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LilJ<3 said...
Apr. 9 at 6:25 pm:

Emily, I thought you captured the anxiety of waiting for a test perfectly. The fear of not knowing....the suspense can kill you and you think of the worst, and sometimes that is what you get... I loved how you didnt say what was positive in the test and left it open for the readers interpretation... you are a great writter and will go very far!! Good luck in everything you do..
♥ Jackie

 
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Swimgirl said...
Apr. 9 at 4:06 pm:

Wow, wonderful...such a mystery!
what was the test for????? I need to know!!

 
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tweedle dee said...
Apr. 9 at 12:07 pm:

ya'll, part... no most... of the beauty of this poem is not knowing what its about. personally, i thought it was about a teenage girl waiting with her little cousin to hear if a family member had cancer or something, but that was just my interpretation. anywho... great job emily, i loved it alot!

 
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peaceloveburton said...
Apr. 4 at 4:19 am:

the mystery is what makes me peice so great.
your DYING to know arent you?

haha.
bravo.

 
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MaximumRideGirl'12 said...
Apr. 4 at 1:01 am:

response to courtney1215: hey courtney, i don't want to upset or anything but i think that what ever is positive it up to us, as the readers. to me, waiting for the the results of the test for anything (pregnancy, cancer, STD, etc.) would all be the same thing... the tension, the uncomfortable feeling. etc. i think that it is up to our interpretation as to what it is. but emily, that is really good and great job with the detailing. =D

 
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Jatavion said...
Apr. 3 at 11:57 pm:

i agree with courtney. what exactly are we talking about here???

 
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jmc.13 said...
Apr. 3 at 8:35 pm:

really gripping, enchanting even. amazing description. and though i feel you should keep writing, i am not going to end this comment with a cliche and stupid 'Keep it up!' like everyone else because that's stupid. i'm babbling. goodbye!

 
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Joyce101 said...
Apr. 3 at 5:45 pm:

omg what's going to happen. I've got to know!!

 
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adriana said...
Apr. 3 at 5:24 pm:

I took it right away as if someone was waiting with her boyfriend waiting to find out if she was pregnant. It was very involvoing and i felt myself wanting to read faster to know the results very good. You just need to clarify what the wait is for. On the other hand it does give the reader some space to use their imagination :) yea i contradict myself.

 
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courtney1215 said...
Mar. 15 at 7:04 pm:

wait what was positive... is someone preganant, cancer??? what????

 
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