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Monster

September 11, 2009
By Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
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Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
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How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

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As I'm sitting here, in this box-shaped room, staring at my prey three feet away from me, I am anxious. This child, an innocent child, will die. She is nothing to me, nothing at all. When she wakes, only then will she notice my presence. She is sleeping calmly, probably dreaming sweet childish fantasies of blue skies and purple unicorns flying to see a magical princess. Little does she know that in a few short hours her rosey red complexion will fade away to meet a dull white color. Little does she know that the curls that surround her face will fade and cover a life-less dull face. Little does she know of her radiant blue eyes fading with the sunset. Unlike the sun, her eyes will never surface again.

~Little does she know of the monster I am~

© Elizabeth G., Marblehead, MA

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This was written for my creative writing class. Let's just say the teacher was a little worred.
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arElana PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 29 2009 at 12:40 pm
arElana PLATINUM, Fair Lawn, New Jersey
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wow. im surprised that ur teacher didnt send you to a mental counsler. just kidding! i like the style and the detail, because you could have made that so long and i wouldnt get bored. ur a really good riter.
JJdog920 said...
on Sep. 29 2009 at 11:58 am
I thought you used fantastic descripsion and detail. It made me feel bad for the child. Although the idea was strange, it was wonderfully written
Scitt and Tyty said...
on Sep. 29 2009 at 11:55 am
I am confused about this story.It had good driscription. what's it even about?
felipe#1 said...
on Sep. 29 2009 at 11:54 am
I can see why your teacher would be worried. But it did keep me interested all the way through. My favorite phrase was when it talked about the unicorns and blue skies, because it was the only part that was HAPPY.
Bobin-pin said...
on Sep. 29 2009 at 9:24 am
Nice writting it realy got my attention. It was a bit disturbing but i liked your descriptoin.
Onceknown BRONZE said...
on Sep. 29 2009 at 8:27 am
Onceknown BRONZE, Denver, Colorado
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Courage is doing what your afraid to do<br /> There can be no courage unless your scared<br /> -Eddie Rickerbacker

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I see why your teacher would be worried, but really really nice job. I could easily see this being the Prologue to a good story. Are you going to write more?