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Monster

September 11, 2009
By Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
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Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
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How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

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As I'm sitting here, in this box-shaped room, staring at my prey three feet away from me, I am anxious. This child, an innocent child, will die. She is nothing to me, nothing at all. When she wakes, only then will she notice my presence. She is sleeping calmly, probably dreaming sweet childish fantasies of blue skies and purple unicorns flying to see a magical princess. Little does she know that in a few short hours her rosey red complexion will fade away to meet a dull white color. Little does she know that the curls that surround her face will fade and cover a life-less dull face. Little does she know of her radiant blue eyes fading with the sunset. Unlike the sun, her eyes will never surface again.

~Little does she know of the monster I am~

© Elizabeth G., Marblehead, MA

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This was written for my creative writing class. Let's just say the teacher was a little worred.
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tomtamtimmy GOLD said...
on Apr. 29 2010 at 4:56 am
tomtamtimmy GOLD, Sydney, Other
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you don't know how strong you are until being strong is the only choice you have

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LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOOLOL

 

Meago GOLD said...
on Apr. 28 2010 at 3:16 pm
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

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How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

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If you think my teacher was scared.. Image what my mother had to say. lol
Meago GOLD said...
on Apr. 28 2010 at 3:15 pm
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

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How come when you need something the most- that's the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

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You know... That's not a bad idea... MWWAHHHAHAHA.. lol
Cuore GOLD said...
on Apr. 27 2010 at 7:57 pm
Cuore GOLD, Saint Augustine, Florida
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Be the change you wish to see- Ghandi<br /> <br /> Everything in this room is eatable, even I&#039;m eatable, but that my dears is called cannibalism and is highly frowned upon in most societies.- Willy Wonka<br /> <br /> Bright lights often blind those who can&#039;t see. ~

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You should leave a note for your teacher saying 'your next' just to freak her out.
JacobC GOLD said...
on Apr. 22 2010 at 4:18 pm
JacobC GOLD, Belgium, Wisconsin
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I would be a little scared if I were your teacher, but it is awesome writing.
fiction77 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 21 2010 at 3:42 pm
fiction77 BRONZE, St. John&#39s, Other
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very cool. The writing is excellent. You should read my story. (mad world)
angel2745 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 18 2010 at 9:23 pm
angel2745 BRONZE, Sacramento, California
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very creative! your teacher is not a very good teacher if she/he can't handle this! it's not gory or graphic, it's very elegantly written! 5*
Bella PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 18 2010 at 5:03 pm
Bella PLATINUM, Belleville, Illinois
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I think this is nicely written and you should and more to it! maybe i'm a little to much in to fiction, but i think its amazing! keep up the good work!
queentabbiecat99 GOLD said...
on Mar. 15 2010 at 9:01 pm
queentabbiecat99 GOLD, Dardanelle, Arkansas
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it's a story that leves you thinking not many story's do
Teenwriter BRONZE said...
on Mar. 5 2010 at 12:31 pm
Teenwriter BRONZE, Hancock, Maine
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This is a good piece of writing. I was a little freaked out. I was not sure who the monster was. Maybe a vampire or a hell hound but it was still a good piece! (By the way it was a little disturbing) :-(
bmmsdw said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 9:28 am
This was a cool story it put a picture in my head
believeinsomthing said...
on Feb. 26 2010 at 5:10 pm
believeinsomthing, Madera, California
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Life is full of twists and turn, but remeber no matter what happens stay true to yourself.

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I really enjoyed this, it was very eerie and creative i liked the shortness of it, it really lets the readers imagination whirl. Atleast for me it did.
Scarlet Rose said...
on Feb. 26 2010 at 4:06 pm
It does seem like a vampire, but I'm a fan of them so I am intriged. Please, if you could, write more onto it. Your teacher must not have read any fantasy books in their life!
quenbeereader44545 said...
on Feb. 15 2010 at 3:44 pm
would have liked it to be longer so u cold explain what the monster was and how his life was but it was a great story
0.0... said...
on Jan. 25 2010 at 8:40 am
>.< lol great minds think alike then. if you like writing/reading stuff about vampires, Interview With Vampire is a good one to read.
Meago GOLD said...
on Jan. 23 2010 at 9:08 am
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
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How come when you need something the most- that&#039;s the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

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Thank you so much!!!
Meago GOLD said...
on Jan. 23 2010 at 9:07 am
Meago GOLD, Spring City, Tennessee
17 articles 2 photos 83 comments

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How come when you need something the most- that&#039;s the time when you have to fight the hardest to receive it?

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I've never read or even heard of that book. lol I wrote this a year ago out of pure imagination in my creative writing class.
0.0... said...
on Jan. 22 2010 at 9:22 am
Rezembles Interveiw with a vampire a little to closely =S
silver SILVER said...
on Jan. 20 2010 at 2:32 pm
silver SILVER, Fonda, New York
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reading takes you places you would never dream of so keep dreaming...

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this is so cool...
Ihavemyownopinion! said...
on Jan. 18 2010 at 3:54 pm
Ok slightly creepy but in a good way i think but i still cant grasp what your talking about! killing kids is a little dark though! I like it though! Dark but good :)