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Dreams fall from my ceiling, I try to catch them but they just slip through my fingers. I take deep breaths to breath them in, but they steady fall ignoring my efforts. suddenly the door slams shut. I feel trapped, alone in an unknown room with my dreams. They seem to haunt me but I have no proof. I am stuck. I lay on my bed gasping for air. I run to the window seeing if it will have mercy on me and will budge. It doesnt. I am stuck. The dreams continue to fall, but now they whisper to me. Making fun. Saying what I have created is now my taunte, they tease me. "You`ll never get me one whispers". I break down and cry. My heart begins to thump so hard I think it will break my chest. it does my chest begins to open. right in the middle of my heart lies a key. Could it be that the secret to get my dream was inside of me?
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This article has 4 comments.
It is an interesting idea, bt you could make some changes to improve it.
Most readers don't like to read a story in one paragraph, no matter how short it is. There were several points where you could have made a break, most notably when the tone switched from embracing the dream to fearing it.
Altering the formatting could also give your repetition of the phrase 'I am stuck' greater impact. At the moment it seems closer to redundancy than a rhetorical device.
Also there were several grammatical and punctuational errors that you could have fixed by simple proofreading.
I wish you luck with your next story.