Sept. 29, 2010 at 9:52 am
Im new to this website and to poetry for that matter. and i would just like an honest opinion about something i wrote. I hope u can understand it, but you guys are probably on a different intellectual level than others so you prolly will. here it is:
The Ocean
My eyes are open; my mind is shut; I am formless.
There is a face that is faceless,
Its memory drowned, suffocated.
My soul bleeds;
My body rots;
My roots are but ashes.
How can one see, what one does not know?
Ignorance is the flame that has brought my downfall.
I choke to mutter words of vindication, but words cannot save me now.
I reach out,
Its eyes meet with mine,
But still I cannot see.
A starving corpse spreads its filth within me,
A parasite, a virus.
The stench is trapped inside; I am shut.
The faster I run, the farther it gets.
The more I struggle, the smaller it becomes.
I am just out of reach, an unexplained obstruction.
The weight that I pull is too much to bear, but far too great to let go.
It drags me to the depths,
The Ocean Yore is my shackle.
It erodes my foundation.
Where do the stones lie?
A tree cannot stand without its roots.
Quiet desperation is my battle cry, my squall,
But my cries are heard only by the spoiled corpse within me,
Who, in turn, stretches its arms and tightens its grip.
I leer up from below the waves.
The sun slowly fades into obscurity,
Its golden hew festering into darkness.
A vile jeer ripples through my coffin,
One that was built from my own bark,
Planks cut from my flesh.
The charred sap, oozing from the scars, binds each together.
I am sealed, shut, locked, where is the key?
A hot and heavy breath strews across my sweat-covered face. I am not alone.
There is a sneer I cannot see,
But rather I feel it, a shallow comfort.
It engulfs me, for this is the most familiar of all.
“Who are you old friend?”
“Who are you brother?”
The words pass between his fangs like that of light through a prism.
A thought slithers up my throat, only to transfigure into words.
My lips curl, I grit my teeth, I pound my fist against this wretched tomb.
I howl the words in hubris. “I am God!”
…And so He wept yet another tear;
It falls softly upon this bed of vacuity.