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Your loving vengeance
Your hateful mercy
A two sided coin
I don't know which I prefer
I cannot live without your love
And your forgiveness I can't go without
So extract your vengeance
Or hate me thoroughly
It's not my decision
Though my choices
Brought us here....
Okay like it, but why is "And your forgiveness I can't go without" bolded? It is a somewhat strong line, but I don't feel like it is very strong, and the boldness is drawing unwanted attention to it. I really really liked the last two lines.
This is really cool! Is it bolder because of the structure, how it sticks out farther than the other lines? Or maybe how you talked about a two sided coin and there's "two sides" of the poem divided by the bolder line? Lol, or maybe I'm reading too much into it. Anyways, I thought your word choice was very good, and your insights very interesting:). Could you read something of mine? Thanks!
thanks for ur input.... and IDK why it bolded, cuz i didn't do it :)
And, yes, i can read something of yours
thATS pretty good. can you rean and comment on some of my poems?
yes i can:)