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Hide and Seek MAG

By Anonymous

     As the numbers count down
We scatter the ground,
Searching for the best places to hide.
Some dive beneath the kitchen table,
Others huddle in dark corners
Pretending they aren’t able
To be seen.
I know better, I’ve played this game before,
Running to the hallway closet
Peeking through the blinds on the door.
The places where you can see but can’t be seen
Are the places that will get you far.
And as I watch the others being called out,
I refuse to be found.
I hold my breath and try not to breathe aloud
And for a brief moment I am undiscovered,
A mystery to all
But I slip
And he looks me straight in the eye
Right through the blinds
And as the door opens wide,
I am found once again.




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on Feb. 2 2018 at 12:08 pm
Breezette DIAMOND, Uniontown, Arkansas
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this is such an accurate poem, I looooove it!!!

i love this so much!

on Sep. 17 2015 at 5:08 pm
elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
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Take nothing but pictures,
Kill nothing but time.

Great work!

on Mar. 18 2015 at 11:34 pm
TheBellroseFairy BRONZE, Miami, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"The only things that are infinite in this world is the universe and human stupidity. And I'm not sure about the former." -Albert Einstein
"Procrastination is the art of keeping up with yesterday." Don Marquis

In the 19th line, you use the words "try not to breathe aloud" when it should be "try not to breathe out loud". Your line breaks are a mess. You should keep in mind that poetry is the best words in the best order. This poem does have some dark undertones, so you can probably describe the burning anticipation of being found with some vague hints of what'll happen if you are.

on Jul. 15 2013 at 2:26 pm
CatchAFallingStar PLATINUM, Pearland, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If you love something, let it go. If it comes back to you, it's yours, if it doesn't, it never was." - Unknown

I think this poem is very well written. Nice job :)

on Dec. 2 2011 at 3:52 pm
Compulsiveshoelace BRONZE, Frederick, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Whenever you find yourself on the side of the majority, it is time to pause and reflect. -Mark Twain

This is almost sinister if you read deeper into it, nicely done!

on Oct. 21 2010 at 9:56 pm
Msrbl@Bst BRONZE, Columbia, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Love is the opiate of the universe.

loved it :)

on Oct. 21 2010 at 2:01 pm
AcidRayne BRONZE, City Of Sin, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
"well behaved women rarely make history" marilyn monroe

kinda dark ...i like it:)

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on Oct. 21 2010 at 10:47 am
sooverhim, Cincinnati, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
My one view on like everything is "everything that glitters is not gold. because that is so true.

i dont get this..like at all

on Mar. 17 2009 at 8:00 pm
Ashley Wheeler, Naples, Florida
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I love this poem!!! It's so so so good!