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By Anonymous, Memphis, TN

Standing on the edge of a black hole
prancing on the peripheral
proceeding into the darkness
Balancing, trying not to fall

Invisible breeze swaying these feet
in and out, in and out
tripping, trying not to fall

Into this black hole
that threatens to swallow me up in one gasp
Swathing me in the dark
snipping the veins of declaration

Once before, I had tumbled,
deep into the abysmal hole.
I never hit the bottom, but scraped the edges just enough to feel the pain.

Nails bracing,
toes breaking
struggling only to see those tiny hands
and that sliver of lightt

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9 comment(s)
This is a beautiful and descriptive poem. I love your use of metaphor :)
Apr. 18, 2013 at 4:41 PM • Report
thanks for the nice feedback guys! I wrote this, but it showed up as anonymous for some reason ?? Please encourage others to read this and vote! tnak you! x
Jan. 04, 2013 at 2:05 PM • Report
*thank you lol
Jan. 04, 2013 at 2:06 PM • Report
Sometimes they put stuff as anonymous because of its 'sensitive nature', even if you didn't mark the little "I would like to be anonymous" check mark. As for the poem, very good! Excellent word choice and description. 5/5!
Apr. 17, 2013 at 2:52 PM • Report
Wow- amazing! Great details and specifics. I love how at the end the reader finds out that the hole you are afraid to fall in is deeper within yourself. Great job! Keep writing poetry!! 
Jan. 02, 2013 at 1:50 PM • Report
This is absolutely wonderful, I can relate to this completely. Your emotion is perfectly conveyed.
Jan. 01, 2013 at 8:34 PM • Report
I can totally relate to this.  I also have a hard time with being introverted.  Nice work on it!
Jan. 01, 2013 at 6:27 PM • Report
This is amazing! Great use of words and definitely meaningful. Please keep writing!!
Jan. 01, 2013 at 5:09 PM • Report
I really liked this, keep up the good work!
Jan. 01, 2013 at 3:50 PM • Report