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Ponderings on My Carpet This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This work has won the Teen Ink contest in its category.

By Kelsie A., Indianapolis,

I settle back with a dull thump
Onto the carpet that should’ve been swept last week.
Oh well.
I had better things to do.
Besides
When I am gone this is how I will be remembered, I think:
The little bits of everything strewn across the floor.
Only a bit of dirt or a ragged thread left for someone else to stumble over,
But to some sentimental soul, it could mean that time we went to the creek
And laughed all night, the only souvenir the mud on our shoes.
Or the day I noticed my favorite jeans were frayed at the cuffs
And left them that way, only to have that ragged thread fall,
Marking something, some small moment of my life
Pressed into the carpet for all to see.

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3 comment(s)
ItsJustV
The beginning was a bit slow, but as the piece progressed, I was enveloped in the simple way you mused. Interesting and different. Well done.
Nov. 06, 2012 at 7:28 AM • Report
OldYoungOne
I like the poem as well.... it seems you know what youre talkn about could you read my work and give me somepointers?
Nov. 06, 2012 at 10:20 PM • Report
incognito411
i completely agree! it pulled me in by the title and i was glad it was a poem, it was well-written but if u spend a little more time on the cadence and slow the shown thought-process, it will be a lot deeper and the words will make the meaning and the reminiscing much stronger.
Nov. 06, 2012 at 6:55 PM • Report
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