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Dreams This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This work has won the Teen Ink contest in its category.

By Oelania P, Brooklyn, NY

     I feel his hand on my shoulder. It is cold, bony, and scrapes against my skin. It doesn’t sting too badly. Pain doesn’t cause discomfort for me - it’s like a Popsicle - strong at first, but after awhile, it melts away. He tells me something, the man behind me. I don’t hear him at first, and that makes him angry. He grips my shoulder tighter.

Now there is pain, pain like grabbing a wire hanger that is left beside a fire, yet I ignore it. He knows I am here, I know I am here, but for some reason, I feel if I don’t acknowledge it. If I ignore what is happening, we will both remain suspended. The two of us will stay lost in this never-ending scene, and I will never die.

The knife enters me anyway.

I feel it; I’m not quite numb yet.

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40 comment(s)
Wow this is a fantastic story, usually when reading other stories I get bored and don't even finish them. But this one had me reading it like it was a chapter from a award wining novel. way better than my own writing.
Nov. 16, 2016 at 1:01 PM • Report
That was intense I love this it kept me wanting to keep reading love it keep it up
Jun. 02, 2016 at 6:10 PM • Report
Wow, what a dark, powerful ending.
May. 24, 2016 at 11:31 AM • Report
This is really good!!!
Jan. 13, 2016 at 5:19 AM • Report
That was incredible! Awesome job. I couldn't stop reading it! Keep up the good work.
Oct. 17, 2015 at 9:34 PM • Report
Wow. That was intense. What an incredible story. The plot, the was thrilling to read. I enjoyed every word of it. I was hooked beyond belief and my mom is yelling at me like crazy now to go do the dishes...but really. Great job! Keep writing, I can't wait to read more of your work.
Jul. 11, 2015 at 8:45 PM • Report
Loved this!!!!
May. 16, 2015 at 1:20 PM • Report
Apr. 24, 2015 at 10:10 AM • Report
That is really good!
Apr. 02, 2015 at 2:33 PM • Report
Well done! You did a good job of making the readers feel sympathy for the main character. :D
Jan. 04, 2015 at 5:00 PM • Report