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Darkest Day    (Continued)

And the falling ice became
Tiny, frozen shards of glass
That would pierce your skin
With a sharp quickness
At each tiny movement
That you dared to make
In that stark, stiff, stinging air.
It was the darkest day,
And as I faced the cold window,
It became caked
With a thin haze
From the moistness
Of my breath
And it was all I could do
Not to rub it all away with my fingers
And reveal the snowy world beyond.

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19 comment(s)
Your teacher was very right when rewarding you, congrats, brilliant!! :)
Nov. 25, 2013 at 2:10 PM • Report
Thank you. (:
Nov. 30, 2013 at 12:56 PM • Report
Beautiful use of imagery!
Apr. 29, 2013 at 6:39 PM • Report
Thanks! I appreciate your feedback.
May. 01, 2013 at 5:45 PM • Report
WOW, the image created in my head was amazing I especially loved the last few lines, though they were simple, they gave me that nice tingly feeling. I like it!  :D I'll read more I think!
Mar. 29, 2013 at 3:48 AM • Report
Thank you so much! (:
Mar. 29, 2013 at 2:19 PM • Report
Oh You're always welcome!! 
Mar. 29, 2013 at 10:44 PM • Report
Wow, this was amazing! I like the twist at the end... Congratulations on making it into the magazine, you deserve it!! :)
Mar. 26, 2013 at 11:14 PM • Report
Thank you SO much! I'm really prou.d. (:
Mar. 27, 2013 at 5:42 PM • Report
DEFINITELY worthy of the grade :) At first I thought something bad was happening, but it's so good as a descriptive piece.  Your imagery and word choice, again, is astounding.  I just...LOVE IT!!!!!
Mar. 26, 2013 at 10:31 AM • Report