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Piano in the Snow

By alexsandcastle, Columbia, MO

It was December
Christmas Eve to be exact
Snowflakes littered the ground
Like cigarette butts on the
Sidewalks of New York City

All around the world
People were surrounded by family
Their hearts filled with hope
Awaiting the joys
Of tomorrow

The soldier walked slowly through the forest
He was not with his family
His heart was not filled with hope
And tomorrow only meant
More fighting and shooting

Trudging grimly
Through the
Leaf covered ground
It was silent

The only sound was the
Crunch
Crunch

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7 comment(s)
Loveislife
I really enjoyed the poem, it felt like i was an observer watching, waiting for something to create anything, creating a poem,or storie out of a picture is fun and unique, i enjoyed your poem.
Nov. 27, 2012 at 3:56 PM • Report
alexsandcastle
Thank you so much!!! This poem was a lot of fun to write and I'm glad people are enjoying it! :D
Nov. 27, 2012 at 4:33 PM • Report
Caleb S.
The title of this snagged me. I tip my hat to you. :) Otherwise, the imagery has an incredible feeling. The total difference of places,( surrounded by family, and in a cold forest) was astounding. If I had a tip to give, it would be to lenghten the feeling of the man. What he felt. Along with that, don't spell his feelings out, and don't drag it out.
Your very first?
I am stunned.
 
Nov. 26, 2012 at 5:24 PM • Report
alexsandcastle
Awww! This means so much to me! And I will definatley take that into consideration on my next poem! :D
Nov. 26, 2012 at 7:04 PM • Report
Puzzle
Glad to be of help. :)
Nov. 28, 2012 at 4:11 PM • Report
Thatdaydreamer
I'm glad you decided to tell the pictures story because this is really beautiful:) lovely imagery!
Nov. 26, 2012 at 4:17 PM • Report
alexsandcastle
Thank you SOOO much! It really means a lot to hear such kind feedback on my first poem! :D
Nov. 26, 2012 at 4:19 PM • Report
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