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SuperNOVA

December 5, 2010
By Timekeeper DIAMOND, Cary, North Carolina
Timekeeper DIAMOND, Cary, North Carolina
62 articles 0 photos 569 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A guy walks up to me and asks 'What's Punk?'. So I kick over a garbage can and say 'That's punk!'. So he kicks over a garbage can and says 'That's Punk'?, and I say 'No that's trendy'!"- Billie Joe Armstrong, Green Day


Summary:

John Lange was your typical New York detective. At least, that's what he's been told. The only thing Lange can remember is getting caught in a near fatal explosion, and now his ex-wife's employers, an organization known only as Project NOVA, have become his only lifeline. No one's willing to tell the whole truth, and no one can be trusted. NOVA's own operatives have been disappearing, and someone on the outside has been watching Lange for a long, long time.

But before Lange can investigate the secretive Project NOVA, he's going to have to learn the truth about himself. And the secrets John Lange's own mind hides may yet make this case his last!


Frank C.

SuperNOVA


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LASwan SILVER said...
on Feb. 22 2011 at 10:25 am
LASwan SILVER, Yukon, Oklahoma
5 articles 0 photos 55 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don&#039;t worry about the world endng today. It&#039;s already tomorrow in Australia.<br /> -Charles Schultz

I really like it so far. Mystery and intrigue, all good! As someone else has stated, you could use more setting details, but not too many so that they detract from what's happening. Could you check out my two short stores, please?

on Feb. 22 2011 at 9:59 am
Timekeeper DIAMOND, Cary, North Carolina
62 articles 0 photos 569 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;A guy walks up to me and asks &#039;What&#039;s Punk?&#039;. So I kick over a garbage can and say &#039;That&#039;s punk!&#039;. So he kicks over a garbage can and says &#039;That&#039;s Punk&#039;?, and I say &#039;No that&#039;s trendy&#039;!&quot;- Billie Joe Armstrong, Green Day

Thanks for your thoughts! As I've said before, the early draft of the novel included self-imposed pacing limits etc. which contributed to the fast, plot-oriented pacing. Later drafts are a bit looser with an emphasis on painting a portrait.

on Feb. 21 2011 at 11:56 am
MoandBrowniegirl SILVER, Toronto, Other
7 articles 3 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Reach high, for stars lie hidden in your soul; dig deep, for every dream preceeds the goal.&quot;

Sorry, the comment-thing seems to have submitted twice. Oops!

on Feb. 21 2011 at 11:54 am
MoandBrowniegirl SILVER, Toronto, Other
7 articles 3 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Reach high, for stars lie hidden in your soul; dig deep, for every dream preceeds the goal.&quot;

This work is very interesting! I enjoyed how you took a very over-used (in my opinion) genre, that of the mystery special forces thriller, and turned it into something approaching a conspiracy story. I also liked how you took the time to give your characters thorough back-stories while leaving just enough secrecy to keep it enticing.

The one thing you could work on would be to develop more setting details, such as at the bar and hospital. The reader is given a location, but almost nothing about how it looks, smells, etc.

Overall, though, great work. This is certainly the beginning of something good! 


on Feb. 20 2011 at 8:24 pm
Alec.M.Strong BRONZE, Kent, Washington
1 article 0 photos 8 comments
The Black Arrow Murders, it's #4 on top rated.

on Feb. 20 2011 at 4:19 pm
Timekeeper DIAMOND, Cary, North Carolina
62 articles 0 photos 569 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;A guy walks up to me and asks &#039;What&#039;s Punk?&#039;. So I kick over a garbage can and say &#039;That&#039;s punk!&#039;. So he kicks over a garbage can and says &#039;That&#039;s Punk&#039;?, and I say &#039;No that&#039;s trendy&#039;!&quot;- Billie Joe Armstrong, Green Day

Everything is still just talk right now, but hopefully it will be in stores in full by the end of the year!

on Feb. 20 2011 at 4:00 pm
Timekeeper DIAMOND, Cary, North Carolina
62 articles 0 photos 569 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;A guy walks up to me and asks &#039;What&#039;s Punk?&#039;. So I kick over a garbage can and say &#039;That&#039;s punk!&#039;. So he kicks over a garbage can and says &#039;That&#039;s Punk&#039;?, and I say &#039;No that&#039;s trendy&#039;!&quot;- Billie Joe Armstrong, Green Day

Sure, what is the title?

Grace_R SILVER said...
on Feb. 20 2011 at 1:49 pm
Grace_R SILVER, Lenexa, Kansas
6 articles 4 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
Unless someone like you cares a whole awful lot, nothing&#039;s going to get better. It&#039;s not.<br /> -Dr. Seuss

Where could I find the ending of this? It is very good!

on Feb. 19 2011 at 9:40 pm
Alec.M.Strong BRONZE, Kent, Washington
1 article 0 photos 8 comments
I'm sure it is well written and will be a great piece. I'm not as good of a writer as you but id appreciate if you checkout my book. It is a childrens book so the weak vocabulary is purposely done. Thanks

on Feb. 19 2011 at 7:56 pm
Timekeeper DIAMOND, Cary, North Carolina
62 articles 0 photos 569 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;A guy walks up to me and asks &#039;What&#039;s Punk?&#039;. So I kick over a garbage can and say &#039;That&#039;s punk!&#039;. So he kicks over a garbage can and says &#039;That&#039;s Punk&#039;?, and I say &#039;No that&#039;s trendy&#039;!&quot;- Billie Joe Armstrong, Green Day

Thanks, PLEASE let me know if you take the time to read the rest! I love hearing from my fans :D

on Feb. 19 2011 at 7:56 pm
Timekeeper DIAMOND, Cary, North Carolina
62 articles 0 photos 569 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;A guy walks up to me and asks &#039;What&#039;s Punk?&#039;. So I kick over a garbage can and say &#039;That&#039;s punk!&#039;. So he kicks over a garbage can and says &#039;That&#039;s Punk&#039;?, and I say &#039;No that&#039;s trendy&#039;!&quot;- Billie Joe Armstrong, Green Day

Thanks, I've been having some inner turmoil about the early chapter drafts (the ones on TeenInk) and how they stack up with the current drafts--I think everyone will be impressed with the quality of the newer material and how it breaths more life into the work than before.

on Feb. 19 2011 at 7:55 pm
Timekeeper DIAMOND, Cary, North Carolina
62 articles 0 photos 569 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;A guy walks up to me and asks &#039;What&#039;s Punk?&#039;. So I kick over a garbage can and say &#039;That&#039;s punk!&#039;. So he kicks over a garbage can and says &#039;That&#039;s Punk&#039;?, and I say &#039;No that&#039;s trendy&#039;!&quot;- Billie Joe Armstrong, Green Day

Thanks, I'm glad you like it--it's always good to hear from my fans!

on Feb. 19 2011 at 1:50 pm
Alec.M.Strong BRONZE, Kent, Washington
1 article 0 photos 8 comments
I like your writing style, this is very well written. By far one of the best books ive read on teenink. Great job!

on Feb. 17 2011 at 9:00 am
Vanendra BRONZE, Blasdell, New York
1 article 76 photos 311 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I just sneezed and it hurt my pelvis.&quot;~Jasmine Omg<br /> &quot;A wise girl kisses but doesn&#039;t love&quot;~Marylin Monroe<br /> &quot;I didn&#039;t tell him nowhere where you live&quot; ~me ^-^<br /> &quot;I like the wolves on this textbook, they have very legs&quot; ~Jasmine Omg

I only had time to read the first chapter, but so far your work is excellent!!!! ^-^

on Feb. 16 2011 at 11:43 am
SwiftSnowPack, Littleton, Colorado
0 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The grass withers and the flowers fade but the word of our God will stand forever.&quot; Isaiah 40:8

Wow great job!!!

on Feb. 10 2011 at 9:25 pm
Timekeeper DIAMOND, Cary, North Carolina
62 articles 0 photos 569 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;A guy walks up to me and asks &#039;What&#039;s Punk?&#039;. So I kick over a garbage can and say &#039;That&#039;s punk!&#039;. So he kicks over a garbage can and says &#039;That&#039;s Punk&#039;?, and I say &#039;No that&#039;s trendy&#039;!&quot;- Billie Joe Armstrong, Green Day

It will probably be much easier to write a pitch-styled summary after I've finished the final draft of the novel-- I'll be able to objectively decide what is important enough to address and how to approach the work as a whole.

 

Thanks for your thoughts, by the way, I really apprecaite it. Ultimately we're all here on TeenInk to hone our craft, and I appreciate your help.


on Feb. 10 2011 at 8:44 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1752 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker<br /> We cannot change the cards we&#039;re dealt just how we play the hand<br /> Experience is what you get when you didn&#039;t get what you wanted<br /> It&#039;s pretty easy to be smart when you&#039;re parroting smart people<br /> -Randy Pausch

Okay, that's a fine chapter length. :D

 

Yeah, the summary is what you would call a pitch, what you find on the back of the cover. I know it's hard, but you'll have to do it.  You purposely don't tell much in the pitch.


on Feb. 10 2011 at 7:52 pm
Timekeeper DIAMOND, Cary, North Carolina
62 articles 0 photos 569 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;A guy walks up to me and asks &#039;What&#039;s Punk?&#039;. So I kick over a garbage can and say &#039;That&#039;s punk!&#039;. So he kicks over a garbage can and says &#039;That&#039;s Punk&#039;?, and I say &#039;No that&#039;s trendy&#039;!&quot;- Billie Joe Armstrong, Green Day

Oh and as for the summary itself, it was just something I threw together-- basically I used it as a "back cover" kind of description...it's hard to sum up the story I'm telling in just a few sentences. It was purposefully sensationalist and vague, and in retrospect the exclamation does feel out of place (but at least it wasn't in the actual prose, haha).

on Feb. 10 2011 at 7:20 pm
Timekeeper DIAMOND, Cary, North Carolina
62 articles 0 photos 569 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;A guy walks up to me and asks &#039;What&#039;s Punk?&#039;. So I kick over a garbage can and say &#039;That&#039;s punk!&#039;. So he kicks over a garbage can and says &#039;That&#039;s Punk&#039;?, and I say &#039;No that&#039;s trendy&#039;!&quot;- Billie Joe Armstrong, Green Day

Not a problem. I've tried not to write a ridiculously complex thousand page work--I'm writing specifically for my audience (the average teenager) and I think it has been successful so far.

on Feb. 10 2011 at 10:48 am
projectwarbird SILVER, Cordova, Tennessee
5 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Aristophanes once wrote, roughly translated; &#039;Youth ages, immaturity is outgrown, ignorance can be educated, and drunkenness sobered, but STUPID lasts forever.&#039;&quot; ~William Hundert

I figured it wasn't but I couldn't be sure.