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HomeThe Fantasy Chronicles
The Fantasy Chronicles
Summary: Princess Teresa is the daughter of Queen Florence, ruler of Fantasia. For years, Fantasia has been at war with Lord Umbros along with his ally Shadow. The queen has been captured by Lord Umbros and Teresa along with Adora, Aeirth, Whitebeard Craven and Leon are going to save the queen from his evil clutches. Will they be able to save the queen and stop Lord Umbros in time?
JournieI have just one thing to say: that when you go in and out of flashbacks you should find a better transition than just (flashback...) maybe you could use something along the lines of "Teresa remembered when she was so-and-so years old..." or have her see a certain object that evokes a particular memory or whatever, you know what I mean? - just for future reference.
Cool! I love it! Excellent writing. I also love the names by the way. :) I can picture the characters so well (especially Aeirth and Adora haha).
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