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“What was that about? Did you see her eyes?” I stumble over my words stuttering them out. “What was what about? Uh who? There was no-one here.” Sienna is looking at me confused and worried, her forehead is all crumpled in a way I never thought possible, it almost potato like. There I went again. I sigh “Áine, she was just here but she was acting strange.” “Who is Áine?” “You know that little girl with the ginger hair, she’s really perky.” “Vee? None of the children have ginger hair.” ”I know, it’s only Áine that does, come on we’ll go back and I’ll show you her.” We made our way back to camp in silence. Honestly I doubted whether Áine was real, and I was scared I would come across as mad. The time from the clearing to the camp passed so quickly, maybe it was because I was deep in thought. We came back and Sienna went up to an eight year old girl with long hair. “Hi, can you tell me where I might find Áine?” the little girl considered, and turned back to us in a sing song voice “Hi, I’m Abigail, oh Áine you say? Well I was talking to a girl called Áine-“I sighed with relish at this point and I admit I was a little smug, but then she continued, “She was ginger right? She was quite lively. Shame that plane killed her; she had a lot of potential.”
I stared at Abigail half expecting her to laugh and say ‘look at the look on your face!’ but she didn’t she gave us a farewell and went over to her family. “See, there is no Áine here, we’ve looked everywhere.” She elongated the last word making it sound like we’d asked a thousand people. “We only asked Abigail.” I stated, I was a bit frustrated with her. She looked muffled and then said in a low tone “Who’s Abigail?” Then I got it, she was playing a joke on me! Well it was a crude one and I didn’t think it was funny “Oh stop now. Seriously, it is not funny.” I turned round so fast I didn’t even notice her reaction. With that I stalked off and made my way over to a boy tossing a mango in the air “How’s it going?” he asked, have we met before? I’m sure I have not talked to him yet. “Good, you?” “I’m fine; you are probably wondering how I know you Vee.” “Yes I was.” “Áine told me about you” I exhaled, Sienna was joking, this was a sick joke of hers. I guess I took too much time thinking about Sienna and did not give him a reply, because when I went to speak to him again he was gone. Maybe I have that effect on people – I bore them so much that they have to leave. I don’t blame them; I would do the exact same.
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Gleekgurl said...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 1:33 pm:
This book is really good and I could relate to the main character very well! ;))
 
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Chocoholic101 said...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 1:30 pm:
This is really great! Lovee it!!
 
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NNNEEEOOO11 said...
Dec. 13, 2011 at 7:03 pm:
   If I could favorite this, I would... (But the button won't appear for novels)...
 
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NNNEEEOOO11 said...
Dec. 13, 2011 at 6:55 pm:
   I am addicted to LOST, one of the greatest shows ever made (in  my opinion), and I could not help but feel the same enchantment through your words that LOST showed to to me in every episode. Description, origionality, and plot twists were masterful in this epic story. I was amazed with every paragraph, and I can only hope that you will professionally publish this one day. Besides a lack in flow between chapters 5 and 6 (the alien part was a little sudden and unexplained) I love... (more »)
 
Chocolatefrog replied...
Dec. 14, 2011 at 10:49 am :
Thank you, some of the others who read my book have often felt confused about the alien part aswell, it was just that i was so excited i wanted it done, i am currently writing two sequels and trying to get them up here, the 2nd is called the experiments - fearless, but it doesn't fearture Vee
 
NNNEEEOOO11 replied...
Dec. 14, 2011 at 12:54 pm :
I cannot wait for your next novel! Yeah, I understand how you feel. Sometimes we just need to rush an idea out before it's lost, or we are just too excited to do anything but hurry and bring it to life in words. I still need to edit and improve a few novels of my own. Would you mind reading one such writing, a short story that I wrote last year? It's called "My Netherworld", and it is a dark fantasy  piece of mine. Just click on my profile and select it. I would like a great writer such as ... (more »)
 
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C. said...
Dec. 10, 2011 at 6:27 am:
thankyou very much!
 
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C. said...
Dec. 10, 2011 at 4:35 am:
Thank you very much!
 
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UNserieswriter said...
Dec. 9, 2011 at 4:49 pm:
very good writng! i hate that decent writers like us are overlooked, while overrated writers with mediocre ideas and no understanfing of the craft are boosted to top ten!
 
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Supremequeen said...
Dec. 4, 2011 at 2:57 pm:
V.good we want more we want more we want more < multiplied by a zillion..!!! 
 
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Chocolatefrog said...
Dec. 4, 2011 at 2:00 pm:
Thanks, i am going to write more soon
 
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Wolvo Majella said...
Dec. 4, 2011 at 1:37 pm:
A great story- captivating and engaging from the start!  Utterly enjoyable. 
 
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christmastreelover said...
Dec. 4, 2011 at 11:42 am:
Hey love this!  your writing pure rocks..you writing anymore chocfrog?
 
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