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The experiments

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Am i alone?

I was still sitting on that rock minutes later it was a cold night tonight. The wind was thrashing against my face as if trying to pull me away. I know it was silly but I stood up and followed it. The wind was leading me into the vast jungle. I looked up at the dark chalkboard flecked with white chalk. It should have looked beautiful, but it didn’t. The ground was mud free tonight, much to my utter glee. The wind completely stopped when I reached the same clearing I had seen Áine in the other day. I had that sense of fear again. This wasn’t a good idea. What had I been thinking? Just as I turned I saw three figures in front of me. Any normal person would have fainted. Three aliens standing in front of me, one eye, no nose the mouth was more of a slit, thin and extremely pale.
The first one approached me “Experiment number thirty- nine. How are you? Oh you’re not scared?” his voice was quiet and did not suit him. His head turned and he looked at his peers “Maybe she isn’t right.” Then he spoke again “Okay, let us present you with a little… task.”
I left there dazzled and worried. Yes, I was mad I hadn’t eaten all day yet I did not have any desire to have any food. I knew what I must do. I have one hour to figure out who is the traitor among us. Or in their words “Find one of us” they said in a mocking tone as if it were obvious. But who was it? Was I blind? I got back to camp in a state. And then it came to me. Áine! Was it her? I was the only person who could see her. I started laughing hysterically, tears streamed down my face. I ran all the way back. I didn’t even get out of breath, I felt energised. I came into the clearing wide-eyed ready for someone to jump out at me. Instead they just kind of appeared, like you could see them vaguely and then they became clearer and clearer until they were solidified.
“Have you figured it out?” the middle one asked, tilting his head to the side. “It’s-“ I started but he cut me off. “Disgraceful.” He spat “One of our own doesn’t even know it.” I was confused and he knew it. He looked at me awhile and since I did not even attempt to reply, he explained. “You are the only person on this island.” He told me, again with the mocking thing! Seriously it was like he was so superior. His eyes narrowed as if he could hear my thoughts. “No, there are thirty – one other people here.” I say, it feels like a question. “No, they are ghosts, how could you not realise? Well-“ he says looking me up and down unimpressed “We killed them off on that plane off course, so that is your power- the dead.” I think that was the point I caught my breath what a weird dream, I am more imaginative than I thought. “Ha, as if. Now this experiment did not turn out how we wanted, what to do with the leftovers…let’s see, now you know what happened to the others?” Oh now I know what happened to those humans. Bad news. “Goodbye, we won’t be back, you failed, one step closer to…” And the aliens began to vaporise in front of my eyes. Now I was alone.
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Gleekgurl said...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 1:33 pm:
This book is really good and I could relate to the main character very well! ;))
 
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Chocoholic101 said...
Jan. 21, 2012 at 1:30 pm:
This is really great! Lovee it!!
 
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NNNEEEOOO11 said...
Dec. 13, 2011 at 7:03 pm:
   If I could favorite this, I would... (But the button won't appear for novels)...
 
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NNNEEEOOO11 said...
Dec. 13, 2011 at 6:55 pm:
   I am addicted to LOST, one of the greatest shows ever made (in  my opinion), and I could not help but feel the same enchantment through your words that LOST showed to to me in every episode. Description, origionality, and plot twists were masterful in this epic story. I was amazed with every paragraph, and I can only hope that you will professionally publish this one day. Besides a lack in flow between chapters 5 and 6 (the alien part was a little sudden and unexplained) I love... (more »)
 
Chocolatefrog replied...
Dec. 14, 2011 at 10:49 am :
Thank you, some of the others who read my book have often felt confused about the alien part aswell, it was just that i was so excited i wanted it done, i am currently writing two sequels and trying to get them up here, the 2nd is called the experiments - fearless, but it doesn't fearture Vee
 
NNNEEEOOO11 replied...
Dec. 14, 2011 at 12:54 pm :
I cannot wait for your next novel! Yeah, I understand how you feel. Sometimes we just need to rush an idea out before it's lost, or we are just too excited to do anything but hurry and bring it to life in words. I still need to edit and improve a few novels of my own. Would you mind reading one such writing, a short story that I wrote last year? It's called "My Netherworld", and it is a dark fantasy  piece of mine. Just click on my profile and select it. I would like a great writer such as ... (more »)
 
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C. said...
Dec. 10, 2011 at 6:27 am:
thankyou very much!
 
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C. said...
Dec. 10, 2011 at 4:35 am:
Thank you very much!
 
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UNserieswriter said...
Dec. 9, 2011 at 4:49 pm:
very good writng! i hate that decent writers like us are overlooked, while overrated writers with mediocre ideas and no understanfing of the craft are boosted to top ten!
 
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Supremequeen said...
Dec. 4, 2011 at 2:57 pm:
V.good we want more we want more we want more < multiplied by a zillion..!!! 
 
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Chocolatefrog said...
Dec. 4, 2011 at 2:00 pm:
Thanks, i am going to write more soon
 
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Wolvo Majella said...
Dec. 4, 2011 at 1:37 pm:
A great story- captivating and engaging from the start!  Utterly enjoyable. 
 
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christmastreelover said...
Dec. 4, 2011 at 11:42 am:
Hey love this!  your writing pure rocks..you writing anymore chocfrog?
 
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