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Born Again

May 2, 2011
By Mariam.J GOLD, Dubai, Other
Mariam.J GOLD, Dubai, Other
16 articles 0 photos 72 comments

Favorite Quote:
I don't have many favourite quotes , though I do love the truth that 'change is constant .'
For you , a thousand times over - Hassan , The Kite Runner
If you want to leave footprints in the sands of time , don't drag your feet - Rudyard Kipling


I am the child of change, adopted by many.
From the intense fusion of hope and desire, I was born.

The many who fostered me, became me
Moulded by the hands of happiness and memories in the sun,
Shaped by the sharp blades of misery,
This is what I have become.

Yet, I say to you, I am missing a limb
With every passing moment in time, I am born anew.
With something missing, agreed
But not without a memory in the vault of thought.

The mother of change has brought unto me
A sense of reality, almost extinct in this make-shift world,
Where no one lasts, except my mother.


The author's comments:
I wrote this piece in the dead of night. Most adults who I asked said they liked it yet, felt it was a little heavy for a girl my age. I was just putting my point across.
Change is the only constant in this world, and that's what I was trying to put across. You may want to forget those you have hurt you, but they've changed you nonetheless. They've made you who you are.

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Mariam.J GOLD said...
on Jun. 25 2011 at 12:57 am
Mariam.J GOLD, Dubai, Other
16 articles 0 photos 72 comments

Favorite Quote:
I don't have many favourite quotes , though I do love the truth that 'change is constant .'
For you , a thousand times over - Hassan , The Kite Runner
If you want to leave footprints in the sands of time , don't drag your feet - Rudyard Kipling

If you've just written till the part where you described my metaphors, I've gotten your whole review .

If not, there's something wrong with my comupter :P

Yeah, thanks alot . Just wanted to put across what not only me, but everyone around me feels ..

But sadly, some don't accept it .

: )

 


on Jun. 24 2011 at 4:11 pm
Myvoice4change SILVER, Other, Other
9 articles 3 photos 164 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything will be ok in the end. If it's not okay, it's not the end."

It may be true that poem was "a little heavy for a girl your age," but its the truth, its reality, its what you, me,and everyone else is going through- it's something we can all relate to.

Personally, I love your poem! It is beautiful, descriptive, and well written.

I also love the metaphors you used such as "shaped by sharp blades of misery" and "molded by hands of happiness and memories in the sun." Those metaphors give you a better picture of what is being described in the poem.


Mariam.J GOLD said...
on Jun. 24 2011 at 11:36 am
Mariam.J GOLD, Dubai, Other
16 articles 0 photos 72 comments

Favorite Quote:
I don't have many favourite quotes , though I do love the truth that 'change is constant .'
For you , a thousand times over - Hassan , The Kite Runner
If you want to leave footprints in the sands of time , don't drag your feet - Rudyard Kipling

Oh, wow ! you're makin' me blush (:

I really do appreciate the way you've described my poem . Really nice to have positive feedback .

Thanks alot for your helpful feedback .

And yes, they hurt, but we're the winners in the end ;D :') 


Mariam.J GOLD said...
on Jun. 24 2011 at 11:34 am
Mariam.J GOLD, Dubai, Other
16 articles 0 photos 72 comments

Favorite Quote:
I don't have many favourite quotes , though I do love the truth that 'change is constant .'
For you , a thousand times over - Hassan , The Kite Runner
If you want to leave footprints in the sands of time , don't drag your feet - Rudyard Kipling

A compliment of few words, but meaningful nonetheless (:

Thank you <3'

 


on Jun. 24 2011 at 10:38 am
WithPenAndScript DIAMOND, Venetia, Pennsylvania
72 articles 232 photos 251 comments

Favorite Quote:
I believe that no matter who you are we all leave footprints on this Earth

Pretty Good :)

on Jun. 24 2011 at 9:50 am
youaretheinkandlifeisthepaper BRONZE, Houston, Texas
3 articles 0 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I want to unfold. I do not want to be folded anywhere, because there, where I am folded, I am a lie." Maggie Stiefvater

This was really amazing! I thought theines really flowed well and sort of fell over one another in the most graceful way! Thats a sign of a really good poet :) I think that you are right; the people who hurt us do change us in the forever kind of way and shape who we become as people. You demonstareted it lyricly in this poem. Beautiful!