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Love it! I am going to post some on my blog that I wrote. They arn't proffesional like yours. lol. I will send you an email soon.

Its REALLY prettyt:) I LOVE IT!! keep writing because you have a real gift:)

Nce job, the only thing is....I want more! But seriously, you did a great job. And since you only have one piece here, you can just look at my "Posthumous" piece instead of both the ones asked earlier

I like it, but it is a bit short. Could use more detail and more to the store. But I like the feeling, I can relate!   

Nice job! like thetruthawaits said, you really convey to your reader that there is so much more to the story of the poem. It keeps the reader interested, which is always awesome! Great job!

I feel like there is so much more to the story. It definitely leaves me wondering what all it is, which is a good thing. I think you left yourself open to expanding the poem, which you could do but isn't necessary! This was great. I loved the way it flowed. i don't know if i like that the last line doesn't fit or if i don't like it. I think you could end it in a better way, it feels like it ends a bit suddenly. i really loved reading this honestly! :) hopefully you'll post more so that i can rea... (more »)

I really liked the rythym of it :)

"I feel as if I'm dreaming..." totally doesn't feel like it belongs in the poem- which is perfect! It wakes you up.

Great Job! This is a great poem. keep writing

The poem is good and as relateable as it is. Kudos on the similes nd keep writing... :)

Wonderful word choice! You can definitely feel the way the person expresses toward the situation. They have a feeling of  sadness because of change, but also the acceptance of it happening.  Good work!