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Need Love?

December 31, 2008
By carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
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See it but never feel it.
Get close, only to push it away.
“Don’t know what you’ve got til it’s gone”
Epitome of my life.
What is wrong with me?
What makes me so un-lovable?
Can someone remove this defective sign from my forehead,
And replace it with a kiss.
I want more than mediocre.
I want someone to miss.
Do I ask for too much?
Are my requirements unachievable?
My heart remains unconquered, unattained.
I’m tired of fairy tale endings,
Silly thoughts put in my head by unrealistic, but hopelessly believable movies.
They are all the same.
Girl meets boy. Girl messes it up. Boy forgives girl.
Happily Ever After.
At least they let on that relationships have problems.
I want raw, unrelenting love.
The real deal.
No movie, novel, or episode of “Sex and the City” could ever touch.
Left alone, drowning in thoughts,
Who else in the world could need love,
Like I need love?



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on Dec. 1 2010 at 9:18 pm
Miyu_Black_Rose BRONZE, Dunlap- Councial Grove, Kansas
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;a friend is a person how knows the song in you heart and can sing it back to you when you have lost the words.&quot;<br /> &quot;no guy is worth you tears, and when you find one that is, he wont make you cry&quot;<br /> &quot;i love the nights... even though it reminds me of you.

that really touched me i feel the same way. it least there is someone that understands.

on Dec. 1 2010 at 8:43 pm
Gracious PLATINUM, Go Away, Kansas
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;life sucks and then you die, yeah, i should be so lucky&quot;<br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> -Jacob, Twilight<br /> <br /> I&rsquo;m still that girl who falls when she runs, Getting back up, because falling is fun.

This is my life. for sho

on Dec. 1 2010 at 6:59 pm
D_Beauty BRONZE, Euclid, Ohio
2 articles 1 photo 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;God didn&#039;t promise days without pain, laughter without sorrow, sun without rain, but He did promise strength for the day, comfort for the tears, and light for the way.&quot;

Wow, this was amazing. Breathtaking. Makes me think about some things. Keep writing!

on Dec. 1 2010 at 6:53 pm
AlexisRivera015, Warren, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Here is the test to find whether your mission on earth is finished. If you&rsquo;re alive, it isn&rsquo;t.

this is just breathless

`read mine

im a newbie

lol

this is just amazing

 


AnonyMiss GOLD said...
on Dec. 1 2010 at 5:07 pm
AnonyMiss GOLD, Houston, Texas
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this is so amazing....i love the overall tone and message because i personally can relate to every line

on Dec. 1 2010 at 5:04 pm
OriginalCarbonation GOLD, Naperville, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
dream as if you&#039;ll live forever<br /> live as if you&#039;ll die tomorrow

"get close, only to push it away" favorite line <3

i really liked the message of this poem, however i think the way it was conveyed stylistically and word choice isnt quite right. its lends the wrong tone to it, atleast that is my opnion. i suggest playing around with the same ideas and working to write another different one. because like i said, the message is very good and well thought out.

good work, keep it up! :)


lyndz14 said...
on Dec. 1 2010 at 4:11 pm
This poem was very realative.

cali7flower said...
on Dec. 1 2010 at 4:09 pm
I really appreciate how you captured the essence of love, and how so few things in this world do!  Nicely written.  Please check out some of my work when you get a chance.

AV2010 said...
on Dec. 1 2010 at 2:32 pm
I like the poem because it gives specific meaning to emotions like love.  Everyone at one point in their life can relate to this poem.

LindzKate said...
on Dec. 1 2010 at 2:24 pm

 

Nice! I know how you feel. I'm not in that situation, but the title drew me in. I have a crush in a video game character. Is that weird? Probably is. Sorry. Random. LOL


Grandad Jim said...
on Dec. 1 2010 at 1:09 pm
Too much "Me, me, me" in there. Get over yourself and notice somebody else.

on Nov. 30 2010 at 11:25 pm
AliMallie BRONZE, Westminster, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I&#039;m selfish, impatient, and a little insecure. I make mistakes. I am out of control and at times, hard to handle, but if you can&#039;t handle me at my worst, then you sure as hell don&#039;t deserve me at my best.&quot; -Marilyn Monroe

God, I am so right there with you in my life right now. This is a well-crafted piece of literature, which is nice, but the fact that it has soul makes it exceptional. I hope you find that someone for you and I'll keep you in my prayers.

on Nov. 29 2010 at 1:05 pm
I love this poem! Its amazing! I know exactly how it feels to be in this position. Keep doing what your doing. You'll go far!!! =)

on Nov. 24 2010 at 10:11 pm
phlogiston ELITE, Hermitage, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;A day without laughter is a day wasted&quot; -Charlie Chaplin

Oh my gosh you put the words right in my mouth, and ever so beautifully. I loved the poem.

MWolf9 BRONZE said...
on Nov. 24 2010 at 8:07 pm
MWolf9 BRONZE, Jackson, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Read my work and you will find a new way to view mankind.

I feel that way right now. If only dreams come true and if only the why it happened? is answered. Can one ever be happy?  Great poem..when someone else can relate it is written well. The emotions are as clear as day

Manderine said...
on Nov. 16 2010 at 7:32 am
i really like this poem it reminds me of my life

on Nov. 12 2010 at 11:34 am
you don't have to be sad like this I wish I could help but I like it

erin untied said...
on Nov. 12 2010 at 11:05 am
good i like it a lot

on Nov. 10 2010 at 12:54 pm
loved the poem reminded me of how i use to feel with out love been their befor now bless with an amazing man of god keep up the good work write ur heart out sweetie love it

on Nov. 9 2010 at 8:08 pm
Izabella Sheldon, Milwaukee, Wisconsin
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wow this is lik me for sure cuz i need lovve cuz my bf just dumped me cuz our relantionship was confusing!!!