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Need Love?

December 31, 2008
By carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
8 articles 24 photos 51 comments

See it but never feel it.
Get close, only to push it away.
“Don’t know what you’ve got til it’s gone”
Epitome of my life.
What is wrong with me?
What makes me so un-lovable?
Can someone remove this defective sign from my forehead,
And replace it with a kiss.
I want more than mediocre.
I want someone to miss.
Do I ask for too much?
Are my requirements unachievable?
My heart remains unconquered, unattained.
I’m tired of fairy tale endings,
Silly thoughts put in my head by unrealistic, but hopelessly believable movies.
They are all the same.
Girl meets boy. Girl messes it up. Boy forgives girl.
Happily Ever After.
At least they let on that relationships have problems.
I want raw, unrelenting love.
The real deal.
No movie, novel, or episode of “Sex and the City” could ever touch.
Left alone, drowning in thoughts,
Who else in the world could need love,
Like I need love?



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carijoy SILVER said...
on Jun. 9 2010 at 8:05 pm
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
8 articles 24 photos 51 comments

Thank you all for your thoughts. :)

Anthony, thank you for respecting my opinion, but being honest in yours. I want to know more about why you don't like it... because you really weren't specific.

Demetria, thank you for sticking up for me. That was sweet. :)

Farrell, I completely agree. I LOVE fairy tale endings, they are definitely an escape and an enjoyment, but I wish I was raised around more reality too. I'm not saying that I don't believe in happy endings but that I wish I was shown more realistic concepts too.


inspir3d GOLD said...
on Jun. 8 2010 at 9:29 pm
inspir3d GOLD, Norcross, Georgia
11 articles 2 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
We're all just looking for attention, to be discovered overnight. We're all frustrated by the popular ones that claim the limelight before they fall to pieces. So many of us are stuck under the radar--what makes me different? You decide!

i can identify with this SO MUCH!!!!! this is a perfect blend of poetry and prose and you can really feel the emotion. My fav line was "can someone remove this defective sign from my forehead/and replace it with a kiss." Great work!! Check out some of mine?

on Jun. 8 2010 at 9:26 pm
Brooklynn SILVER, Lake Villa, Illinois
9 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"life is 10% of what happens to me and 90% of how i react to it" John Maxwell

great job!!! i really liked it and it makes so much sense! i loved it and you should def keep writing bc you have some major talent!

on Jun. 8 2010 at 8:51 pm
Alexis7674 BRONZE, Willamsburg, Virginia
2 articles 0 photos 6 comments
that was an amazingly good poem

on Jun. 8 2010 at 8:40 pm
Babygurl_101 SILVER, N/A, California
8 articles 0 photos 118 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Angels are the quiet girls that just havent been noticed yet&quot;<br /> &quot;The past is the past, and i am your futuer.&quot; (&lt;3&lt;3&lt;3&lt;3&lt;3)

wow! this poem is really deep!

i really like it!~ you did really good

keep writting. if you can, can you check out some of my poems???

great job~


kms777 GOLD said...
on Jun. 8 2010 at 6:11 pm
kms777 GOLD, Winn, Michigan
16 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;learn from your mistakes but regret not a thing&quot;

deep thats pretty much all i can say anyone could relate to that because its so true. i hope you'll read some of mine and give me tips how to make mine that way

on Jun. 8 2010 at 5:37 pm
blacknsexy360 SILVER, Glendale, Arizona
9 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;YOU CANT SUCCEED IF YOU DNT TRY&quot;

THIS WAS SO DEEP!!!I FFEL THIS WAY SOMETIMES TOO!LOVED IT

Fuh-rel BRONZE said...
on Jun. 8 2010 at 4:07 pm
Fuh-rel BRONZE, Corinth, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 12 comments
Eh, I don't know about that. Fairy tale endings are pleasing to read about. They suit the imagination and allow people to feel things they wouldn't be able to feel in the real world. This poem just speaks the truth of reality. I did enjoy this poem but i like the fairy tales as well. 

on Jun. 7 2010 at 10:30 am
ChocolateBliss SILVER, Mount Vernon, New York
5 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Time heals everything...&quot;

wow!..i love this..so real so true.

on Jun. 5 2010 at 11:53 am
buggzbunnie BRONZE, Middle River, Maryland
1 article 0 photos 18 comments
i feel the same way we see all these movies and read all these books about happy endings but really i dnt think there is a such thing as happy endings

on Jun. 1 2010 at 12:29 pm
Giggles94 BRONZE, Grand Rapids, Michigan
3 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
A girl should be so lost in God, that if a guy wants to be with her he must know God first.

I like the part where it says "Girl meets boy Girl messes up Boy forgives girl Happily Ever After" It's A LOT like my poem. Over all great poem I liked it. Don't worry God has someone for you, you just gotta be PATIENT! It's hard but it will be worth it in the end.

on May. 27 2010 at 9:59 pm
SwallowedByInsanity PLATINUM, Hillsdale, New Jersey
22 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Love is a poison, but it is also the antidote.&quot;

wow, it really made me think some things over.... very thought provoking! i applaud =)

on May. 27 2010 at 5:12 pm
olympian-queen, Charleston, South Carolina
0 articles 0 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
Yesterday is history. Tommorrow is a mystery. And today? Today is a gift that&#039;s why they call it the present.

you dislike this poem?

then obviously you haven't seen half the stuff that people post on this site.

do me a favor take 10 minutes--no--5 minutes and actually read some of the things that people have written...then come back and read this..if you still feel the same then something must be wrong.

but then again you are intitled to your opinion so......whatever.


on May. 27 2010 at 5:09 pm
olympian-queen, Charleston, South Carolina
0 articles 0 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
Yesterday is history. Tommorrow is a mystery. And today? Today is a gift that&#039;s why they call it the present.

FINALLY! this is very good compared to some of the stuff that is on here. some of your lines were very eye catching and pleasing to the tongue to say. your choice of words showed good use of vocabulary. standing ovation!

aakel BRONZE said...
on May. 25 2010 at 10:20 am
aakel BRONZE, Mayfield, Ohio
3 articles 1 photo 10 comments
Great job! 

chellebby123 said...
on May. 24 2010 at 8:14 pm
this poem is so great, i's happy that im not the only one feeling this way.

anthony s said...
on May. 24 2010 at 12:40 pm
i really dislike this poem and i don't like what you said, but i respect your opinion

on May. 24 2010 at 10:31 am
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on May. 21 2010 at 1:13 am
BloodyMary PLATINUM, N/A, Other
22 articles 8 photos 70 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is like a box of chocolates; You never know what you are gonna get.

OMG! This is a fascinating poem! You touched my heart! Exactly what I'm feeling.

anthony said...
on May. 19 2010 at 11:05 pm

oh God do u make so much sense

 i feel exactly the same way u do, lol its like ur in my head