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Need Love?

December 31, 2008
By carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
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See it but never feel it.
Get close, only to push it away.
“Don’t know what you’ve got til it’s gone”
Epitome of my life.
What is wrong with me?
What makes me so un-lovable?
Can someone remove this defective sign from my forehead,
And replace it with a kiss.
I want more than mediocre.
I want someone to miss.
Do I ask for too much?
Are my requirements unachievable?
My heart remains unconquered, unattained.
I’m tired of fairy tale endings,
Silly thoughts put in my head by unrealistic, but hopelessly believable movies.
They are all the same.
Girl meets boy. Girl messes it up. Boy forgives girl.
Happily Ever After.
At least they let on that relationships have problems.
I want raw, unrelenting love.
The real deal.
No movie, novel, or episode of “Sex and the City” could ever touch.
Left alone, drowning in thoughts,
Who else in the world could need love,
Like I need love?

© Rebecca S., Marblehead, MA

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Basya44 PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 30 2012 at 11:22 pm
Basya44 PLATINUM, Brighton, Massachusetts
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I think this poem portrays a feelings that a lot of people can relate to, but it's a little bit of a diary entry- you are pouring out your heart. It would be better if you coul send a message to the audience as well, or make them think more. Great job! I would love to hear your feedback on my poetry- it is very different from yours. Thanks for sharing:)
GingerRay said...
on Aug. 30 2012 at 11:13 am
  I completely understand what you are interpreting in this poem. It’s the raw truth that so many of us deny we really need and want. I wish to read more of your work my fellow poet.
Mimi15 PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 20 2012 at 8:12 pm
Mimi15 PLATINUM, Belfast, Maine
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This was so powerful. You're a fantastic writer. If you don't mind, I'd love to hear your opinion of my poem Broken Structure. Cheers. :)
MountEverest GOLD said...
on Jun. 25 2012 at 6:03 pm
MountEverest GOLD, Fort Worth, Texas
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&quot;Why rather, sleep, liest thou in smoky cribs <br /> ... <br /> Than in the perfumed chambers of the great, <br /> Under the canopies of costly state, <br /> And lulled with sound of sweetest melody?&quot; By William Shakespeare

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I kind of like it, but I got a little confused? I'm more used to poems with rythems, sorry, but I can really relate to yours.
Azile BRONZE said...
on May. 12 2012 at 1:32 pm
Azile BRONZE, Aurora, Oregon
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Live laugh love

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Oh my gosh was that really about yourself or just a poem you created?
Bailey98 said...
on May. 1 2012 at 8:03 am
I really liked this poem and it was very detailed. The cliches that were often mentioned really helped me better understand the poem, the rhythm and rhyme, also made the poem fluent
Mayteah Perry BRONZE said...
on Apr. 27 2012 at 10:37 am
Mayteah Perry BRONZE, Grandville, Michigan
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this poem is soo good. i love it (:
BritishLittleDemon GOLD said...
on Apr. 20 2012 at 9:35 am
BritishLittleDemon GOLD, Washington Court House, Ohio
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You would have to be CR@ZY to think like me ;)

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I really do luv this one... I would love to read more of your work :3
MysteriousWounds GOLD said...
on Apr. 20 2012 at 12:43 am
MysteriousWounds GOLD, Staten Island, New York
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~Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don&#039;t matter and those who matter don&#039;t mind.~

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i love this. it's like you took the words right out of my mouth
teamo14 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 16 2012 at 7:19 am
teamo14 BRONZE, Paris, Other
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I relate to it. Great poem!
TaylorMarie BRONZE said...
on Apr. 9 2012 at 7:05 pm
TaylorMarie BRONZE, Roscoe, Illinois
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Very relatable! Thanks for posting!
AngelBaron PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 29 2012 at 3:10 pm
AngelBaron PLATINUM, Dallas, Oregon
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&quot;Everything has been figured out, except how to live. &quot; -Jean-Paul Sartre

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This is an deeply understanding piece of work. It accesses the recesses of the subconscience while still displaying the upfront emotions. Everyone has felt this pang of hurt within them during there lives at some time. Some people feel it every day. Thank you for writing something we all can relate to.
writer3499 GOLD said...
on Mar. 12 2012 at 4:53 pm
writer3499 GOLD, New Bedford, Massachusetts
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&quot;it&#039;s impossible to live without failing at something, unless you live so cautiously that you might has well not have lived at all-in which case you fail by default.&quot;<br /> -J.K.Rowling

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Cool Poem!!! I really relate to it..good job!
JessixMathers GOLD said...
on Mar. 7 2012 at 9:59 pm
JessixMathers GOLD, Urbana, Illinois
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No matter where you run I&#039;ll be right there, right behind you, in your nightmares - Eminem &lt;3

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I can totally relate to every word of this, youre a really good writer :)
Shortty1314 GOLD said...
on Mar. 6 2012 at 8:35 pm
Shortty1314 GOLD, Fox Lake, Illinois
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&quot;What, do you really think I was<br /> strong enough to handle it?<br /> If you did, then sweetie, you<br /> don&#039;t know me at all.<br /> These &quot;smiles&quot; are fake.<br /> Just another lie people bought.<br /> You will never know the disaster<br /> that&#039;s behind them.&quot; -Anonymous

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I really enjoyed reading it (: I can relate to this so well. All my poems are about love, the negative side. Keep writing ! (:
FK092495 SILVER said...
on Feb. 27 2012 at 11:58 am
FK092495 SILVER, Crystal River, Florida
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God could not be everywhere, therefore he created mothers.

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this is really good!!!
KComp SILVER said...
on Feb. 19 2012 at 12:38 am
KComp SILVER, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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&quot;religion should be discovered, not taught&quot; -Unknown

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love it, easy to relate to, this had an awesome rawness to it, really was able to push through all of the "true love" stereotypes and really hit the point that people seem to fail to reach most of the time
Let-Love-In PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 14 2012 at 3:30 pm
Let-Love-In PLATINUM, Chester, Connecticut
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&quot;You fail only if you stop writing.&quot;

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emotional and very relatable, amazing work!
GingerLily BRONZE said...
on Feb. 14 2012 at 12:02 pm
GingerLily BRONZE, Aulnay-sur-Mauldre, Other
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&quot;A dreamer is one who can only find his way by moonlight, and his punishment is that he sees the dawn before the rest of the world&quot; - Oscar Wilde

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I love what you're saying about wanting raw love . . . That's exactly how I feel. And you've worded it so beautifiully. That passage about the kiss replacing the marking, beautiful.
BraxtonLangstonChapman SILVER said...
on Feb. 14 2012 at 11:53 am
BraxtonLangstonChapman SILVER, Lexington, North Carolina
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Dedication, Hard Work

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I really would like for my writing to get this many comments can someone explain to me how this is done?