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By Anonymous

We were doomed from the beginning,
Blinded from the start,
But nothing can be done
To fool a happy heart.
With each smile and giggle,
Every embrace and every kiss,
We were shooting toward a happy ending,
And we missed.
Cinderella lost her slipper
And it was never found.
Prince Charming came too late,
Now no one’s sleeping sound.
Pillows are soaking wet,
Hopes are all lost.
No more dancing in the clouds.
Dreams have all been tossed.
The fairy-tale warmth has left us
As winter’s setting in.
The storybook reads the end,
But where should we begin?
Now your heart strives to be broken,
And you long for lonely nights
This time our ship is sinking
We’re going down without a fight.

© Anonymous

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TheWhiteFlower BRONZE said...
on Nov. 14 2011 at 3:16 pm
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one word= W O W!!!!!
BeccaAnne said...
on Nov. 4 2011 at 3:15 pm
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Absolutely Amazing! Keep it up!
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on Oct. 29 2011 at 11:46 am
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This is really good! Wow.

This is AMAZING! The rhyme fits perfectly and the words are precisely chosen. Can you check out some of my work? 

Dudet95 GOLD said...
on Oct. 22 2011 at 11:25 am
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You are a very good writer.This has very good rhyme to it, and you used very discriptive words which I love!Its such a sad poem but it relates more to real life actions, because sadly life is not all about happy endings.I love how you encorperated Cinderella into this story and prince charming.:)amazing job 
Kelssssie BRONZE said...
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This is reallly good, and i can relate alot to it..(:
JojoMimi BRONZE said...
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wow. very good
Wordscantsay BRONZE said...
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Love it , so sweet, sad and cute!!!! 10 out of 10!!!!
AlwaysDanceInTheRain SILVER said...
on Sep. 15 2011 at 9:22 am
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Fantastic! You were really able to put a lot of emotion in it without it seeming too heavy. Great job! Keep writing
UnleashYourMind said...
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This is pretty amazing.. it's so creative and different but true all the same. I absolutly love it. 5 stars :)
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on Aug. 18 2011 at 7:48 pm
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Very descriptive way to say its over. Loved the whole idea. 5 stars.
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It shows lots of meaning, and lots of truthful meanings to this work of art. I love it a lot. <3
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on Jul. 26 2011 at 10:34 am
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i loved the mention of all the fairytale stories!!!!
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on Jul. 18 2011 at 8:35 pm
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I like how it didn't have a happy ending, because in reality there often isn't a happy ending or the ending we wanted.
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Breathtaking and AMAZING.
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This truly took my heart for a ride. I was taken in at the very first line. Keep writing!

I could use a little feedback on my poetry, if you would check. :)

EllieMae SILVER said...
on Jul. 11 2011 at 7:02 pm
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This is so lovely. I was hooked from the beginning. Your ryhtme and emotion portrayed is flawless. Very nice work.
thefamoustapper.... said...
on Jul. 11 2011 at 3:20 pm
I'm truly speechless...in a good way.
ElleNicole BRONZE said...
on Jul. 11 2011 at 10:58 am
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Love it.

I need more feedback, I was wondering if you would rate/comment on my work... thanks if you do and keep writing. This piece is a treasure.

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u combine rhyme with meaning which is what i love about this poem
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love your poem .... very good