I Trust

I think that this line could be improved:

What goes away is sure to come back,
And it comes back to soon go away,
None of it is here to stay,

But I really like it! I love the end. Favourited. :)

I really liked how you described the sun and the moon...and you're absolutely right, "Humans aren't as realiable you see."  I liked that line the most...

i liked how u said 'pearly moon' n 'tangerine sun'! awesome work:)

Speechlessly beautiful. "The tangerine sun ..."
Not all the "rhymes" actually rhymed, and I am SUCH a petty reader when it comes to rhymes, but it hardly disturbed me ... this was marvelous.

i really liked this poem. the end rhyme in the begining mad it flow very nicely. and you images are very clear. i also realy like your word choices. i really liked the phrase tangerine sun. its so fresh. not something you hear very often.

This is really good, not choppy like you said it was. Or at least I didn't think so.
The last three lines almost make it sound like a romance poem, or a poem about saying goodbye to someone.
It's definitely better than most poems I do. I prefer to write novels. And the occasional short story.
: )

This was a good poem! One of the good things about it was that the reader could identify a theme in it (that the not-so-good-stuff is a precurser for the good stuff) early on in the poem and can enjoy the rest of the poem after the first two lines without having to worry about the point or theme. My only suggestion would be to maybe sophisticate the line "what goes away is sure to come back" and maybe say "return" instead of "come back"; the rest of your words are g... (more »)

I luv this poem! It was wriiten very well and had very good details

I like how you describe nature's beauty in this: very descriptive in your words.

pretty good man, try to go deeper into describing how its a promise of nature
overall great poem!
keep it up

loved how you compared things..

I really liked how you describe the sun and moon. Also how you ended it, the last three lines tied everything together.

I absolutely heart it! It's cool how U can tell a story without really going through and telling it!

I liked this one with its nice simplicity. This was my interpretation of the theme: nature always seems so predictable, but with humans, we never know when things will change forever. Also like the nostalgic tone.
Sorry it took so long for me to post another comment! :/