She's Gone

By spitfire213, North Myrtle Beach, SC

They tore us apart.
Mom always told us
“Love your father as well.”
But her mind whispers
“Love me more.”
Dad always proclaimed
“She betrayed me.”
But his thoughts murmured
I seek revenge.
He and I tried neutrality,
but to no avail.
My older brother,
my hero,
despised me for so, so long.
The little ones may have to choose one day as well.
Or it will be chosen for them.

This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

Join the Discussion

This article has 6 comments. Post your own!

Report abuse

CarrieAnn13 said...
Aug. 10, 2011 at 7:39 pm:

I can see why this made it into the magazine. It's great! :)

Report abuse

save.me.4.once said...
Apr. 1, 2011 at 10:00 am:

wow. I cant tell you how many times i felt that way.

Report abuse

Fayrouz said...
Jan. 22, 2010 at 4:48 pm:

I particulary enjoyed the part about the mother saying love your father but also saying love me more between the lines! I could picture the entire time how everything was getting ripped apart, it was beautiful :) good job!

Report abuse

SilverDawn said...
Jan. 18, 2010 at 10:28 pm:

aww, this contained a lot of emotion, with those quoted lines. the finality of the last line added a great impact of a finish

Report abuse

writergirl22 said...
Nov. 16, 2009 at 4:48 pm:

i got that you were talking about divorce
i liked the way you wrote what the mom and dad said and then what they were really thinking

Report abuse

Annabelle7614 said...
Nov. 8, 2009 at 6:31 pm:

I like the idea you have going on here, but if you hadn't put that it was a divorce in the author's comments, I would've never guessed it. Maybe you should vaguely put in there that there was a separation or something.