Just behave

i'm not sure i like it, i just think the end is a bit of a dead beat but thats just me, i hope i'm not too harsh because i do like your pieces! :)

It's a great concept. A lot of people I bet, especially on this website, can relate to it! It's short and sweet, very easy to read but it leaves you with so much more than just a few lines of a poem. You pack a lot of emotion into only 8 lines, which is very nice! Good job!

Maybe, movements is better than dances in the 4th line. But it's just me, so...

This poem is good - short and easy to read... Keep it up :)

Short and sweet!  It's a nice poem, saying how kids aren't supposed to have fun.

i like it! it's true. so much poer in a few lines. I could hear crickets chirping in the silence part. you know how this made me feel? I don't behave. haha. Good job!

I agree, so much meaning in so little lines!!! Its like God telling us to behave and stop being so selfish!!!

as short as it is, this poem is so powerful, i really like it