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Fallen

By , askov, MN
Look at me and watch me cry
See me tremble as I die
Hurting inside
Now I've fallen and cannot fly

For now I lay never found
Crying and hurting on the ground
I have fallen, I can't breathe
I hear myself the dreadful sound.



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Strawberrysunshine22 said...
Mar. 5, 2011 at 1:30 pm:
thanks to yall for the genorous complements.  Ive  never been told these things before and to let yall know im not emo i just write this way lol :)
 
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ipodchick12 said...
Nov. 19, 2010 at 9:27 am:
this peom is really deeep and its a really awesome poem, i wish there was more to it though
 
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running4chance This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 18, 2010 at 5:21 pm:
i can relate to this. it seems it's always the same person who hurts me. but i apparently never leanr xD
 
running4chance This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Nov. 18, 2010 at 5:22 pm :
oops i ment learn
 
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sunnyandsugarThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 17, 2010 at 12:42 pm:
wow that was amazing and very touching you have a very strong talent
 
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MelanieElizabeth_18 said...
Nov. 17, 2010 at 9:31 am:
I love this! its so simple yet gets the message through, its the perfect length. you have so much talent.. great poem
 
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Er_Bear_Is_Awesome said...
Nov. 16, 2010 at 9:23 pm:
That is really good! Its... its beautiful. Wow and i thought action spoke louder than words but wow I was wrong. The saying should be this poem speaks louder than words...
 
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misstywaterfall said...
Nov. 16, 2010 at 12:55 pm:
this is a relly nice poem i love it :)
 
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lexii94 said...
Nov. 16, 2010 at 8:45 am:
really really good :)
 
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Audra M. said...
Nov. 15, 2010 at 8:29 pm:
Thank you guys for all the nice comments. I was kind of scared to put it on here because everyones sounds so much better than my poems. I was really intimadated. lol but thanks again for the wonderful comments
 
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Iloveyoukid said...
Nov. 15, 2010 at 8:03 pm:
short but very meaningful....keep writing
 
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Life_or_Death said...
Nov. 15, 2010 at 7:20 pm:
I like it. you can feel your sadness. Feel better:)
 
Artamis22 replied...
Dec. 12, 2010 at 2:56 pm :
Thank you and i do feel alot better :)
 
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xXnew_revolutionXx said...
Nov. 15, 2010 at 7:17 pm:
It's beautiful... I love it :)
 
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Kay Morzak said...
Nov. 15, 2010 at 12:09 pm:
It's short but i think that that's part of the beauty of it. It flows, and i think that a lot of people can relate to it. :)
 
poetrybutterfly123 replied...
Nov. 15, 2010 at 6:47 pm :
nice poem:)
 
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