death by life

This is really good only thing i would say is use words with description described how lonely your heart is, how you ache for someone to break through the barriers that have been set up without the consent of the one person i surrounds.  That's all that i can suggest....keep on writing your poetry it is really good i can relate to everything.  Please don't take this negatively it is a positive comment just with a few words of wisdom i suppose.  You can take them or you can leave t... (more »)

Lonely night... this is how I feel... I can't handle the silence... Your poem is amazing =]

i can really relate to this its amazing....great stuff :)

this is an amazing poem =) i love the meaning and can relate as well. If this is about you and not ficyional to you, i hope you can find the light that will make you happy and love life. =) good luck