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Bite the inside of my cheek all the whole time,
Fearful wonder

Hopeful hurt.

The taste of blood slowly seeps into my mouth

Metallic.

What is wrong with my blood?

Is blood supposed to taste metallic?

Little shards of invisible metal
Break the skin on the inside of my cheek.

Worry overcomes me
Nervous

Fear

Sadness

Overwhelming

Everything.

Tears, tears, how I long for tears
To run down my face
And lift emotions that weigh too heavily on my shoulders.

But cannot they come?

The shadowy blanket of night
And all asleep
But me.

Writing for answers I am.

Looking at your work,

Loving it

Losing in it.

Thinking it like me,
All of it.

Sleep is not wanted.

For if I sleep,

Tomorrow it shall bring
The haunting morrow
Of unwanted fate
To bring me where I never belonged.

Must

Stay

Awake.




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Basketball23This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 11, 2011 at 7:40 am:
This is really good :) I loved the seperation inbetween the words (I know that sounds kind've stupid) but it really built the anticipation and set the mood.
 
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Mar. 12, 2011 at 1:00 am :
That doesn't sound stupid, B. It's part of the stylistics, like you mentioned in your response. Thanks for the complement. C:
 
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CoffeeThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 16, 2011 at 5:37 pm:

I thought it was a good poem. and the wording and flow were pretty good too. :)

I will admit that i was a little confused by the whole metallic blood thing, but i don't write poems, so im probably not great at reading them either, haha

 
SpringRayynThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Feb. 16, 2011 at 7:59 pm :
What made you so confused in specific? Maybe I can try to un-confuse you.
 
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Mar. 22, 2012 at 1:07 pm :
Man. That poem rocks.
 
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