Where are you?

I was there
When you cried
When you screamed
When you bled.

I listened
To your rants
To your fits
To your lies.

I cried with you
I sat with you

You promised to do the same for me when I needed
Your strength
Your courage
Your understanding
So where are you?

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lovelycheese said...
Feb. 9, 2011 at 10:03 pm:

Poetry isn't quite my specialty, but I'll do my best to critique.

I like the pattern here. However, I think the 'I cried with you / I sat with you' part a bit repetitive from the beginning. Perhaps you could take that part out? And the 'you promised to do the same for me when I need' is slightly too long to compensate with the rest of the poem. Maybe 'You promised to do the same / When I needed / Your strength...' and so on. These are just my thoughts. Overall, this poem is reall... (more »)