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Shattered

surrounded by the darkness
whats become of me?
in my head its darkest
i am blind and cannot see
my heart is full of pain
and nothing can be gained
from this same old show
with nowhere to hide
i am running from my fears
and every night i cry
but no one sees my tears
why doesn't anyone hear me?
its like they cannot see
the bruises and the scars
that my pain has left behind
please tell me loves not far
i've been waiting for so long
will i ever find it?
will we ever join?
so here i sit and write this poem
all alone with the loudness of the silence
shattered in the darkness




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TwinDemons said...
Mar. 14, 2011 at 7:41 pm:
I Love it! Good job!!! Emotions expressed in a poem are freeing. 
 
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Itami4Now said...
Feb. 10, 2011 at 3:35 pm:
I loved it! Seriously, it was great. I know where you coming from when you say you were smiling during the darkest times of your life. Keep up the good work.
 
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lilmartz This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 10, 2011 at 3:23 pm:
This is good! I like how you kept the theme of "the dark" throughout the poem from beginning to end. I think you could probably have lost a couple of the and's and but's in the beginning of some of the lines (personally I think it makes the lines sound much stronger that way). From your comment on the poem, if not with this one then with your next, you should add something about smiling through that terrible time in your life that you mentioned. Just a suggestion! Good job, though. I really like... (more »)
 
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-Insert_Evil_Laugh- said...
Feb. 10, 2011 at 11:43 am:
Very nice, I like the rhyming, it almost gives it a beat.
 
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black_angel said...
Feb. 9, 2011 at 7:58 pm:
This is really nicely put :) i like it too even though it sounds very sad....
 
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POETlover said...
Feb. 9, 2011 at 7:18 pm:
this is beautifully sad. i like it!
 
Ashley M. replied...
Feb. 11, 2011 at 4:18 pm :
i agree with poetlover this is ah-mazzingg ie been reading all our stuff and you are truly talented
 
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