Death

I love the poem, but there is one thing that always bothers me in poems that lack this: punctuation. If you had added punctuation to this poem, it could have easily been a five out of five stars.

Either way, I get the basic idea of the poem. Beautifully written.

heres the thing

Poetry is a hit or miss for me. I don't know how to critique them because I either like them or I don't it seems. Like, I'll read a poem and think "wow that's really boring" or "holy crap this is the coolest thing ever" and someone else will read it and feel differently.

When I read poetry out of a book, it's like going to an art museum. You look at a picture, sometimes you take a long time to admire it, sometimes you just walk away.

This particular poem m... (more »)

Musicispassion

That's a very powerful poem! It's interesting to note that you were inspired by an actual event; pieces based off of real things ususally are the best. Your metaphors were direct and easy to follow, making this poem very easy and fun to read.

Cheers

Finchy