In My Mind

i like this, not only is it short but sweet, but because i can connect with the feeling. although i have to agree, the rhythm is lost in the last line. keep up the good work!

I can't begin to count how many times I've felt like that! I love it!

There are some things I think could be improved. First, like sowhat said, I think the rythm is sort of lost with that last line. Maybe it could be something like "and waves crashing against my skull". And secondly I think the "I am" in the second line should be an "I'm". I'm not sure why, but it just sounds better to me.

There was a rhythm in the first three lines but it was lost in the fourth. Over all though it is very good