Report Abuse Home > Poetry > Free Verse > Se7en Se7en By ZephyrVon-ZombieOverlord, Cartersville, VA More by this author Wrath Lust Envy Gluttony Greed Pride Seven Forces, Fighting Destiny, Til the edge of the World... « Previous article More by this author Next article » Join the Discussion This article has 13 comments. Post your own! Report abuse Toran said... Mar. 26, 2012 at 9:10 am: Nice job. Report abuse milforce said... Oct. 30, 2011 at 9:56 pm: Nice job! So few words and yet, such a big impact! Really good poem! Report abuse Sarajustine said... Oct. 18, 2011 at 4:07 pm: I liked this! It was very simple and meaningful. If I were you, I probably would have added a few more lines to it. But that's up to you. I love the quote on the side, by the way... Hahaa. Report abuse ChocoMint said... Oct. 1, 2011 at 7:39 pm: I think it should be a little longer so it gives the reader more of an idea about what they're reading. It has a great start, just needs to be longer. Report abuse Readqueenz7 said... Sept. 1, 2011 at 5:42 pm: I agree with Harebelle, I think this would be nice if it was longer. Report abuse Harebelle said... Sept. 1, 2011 at 9:50 am: Interesting...and creative, but I think it would benefit from being longer. Keep writing! Harebelle replied... Sept. 1, 2011 at 9:51 am : I just read your description and laughed...I'm on Gaia too! ArchimedesWhite replied... Sept. 1, 2011 at 10:37 am : What's your name on there? Maybe you could join this rp... (of course, this would be after the seven characters became the new sins [long story]) Report abuse Garnet77 said... Sept. 1, 2011 at 4:04 am: Nice. I like that it's so short, yet says so much. Maybe a bit more description would have made it more powerful, but I think it still had an impact. :) Report abuse delz4 said... Aug. 31, 2011 at 11:52 pm: I like the simplicity and shortness of this poem. It gives each individual word its own punch. That said, I think I do agree with rage_against_the_machine, listing the sins doesn't give me much. I like what you did with the ending though, it is powerful Report abuse rage_against_the_machine said... Aug. 31, 2011 at 3:29 pm: Hmm.. I'm not one to judge how someone creatively expresses themselves, and I like the idea of this. But, I'm not really getting anything out of this, I think maybe you should have not named the sins, but rather implied them through description, to add a bit more depth to the poem. ArchimedesWhite replied... Sept. 1, 2011 at 8:46 am : I totally agree... I was simply bored, but i didn't want to write anything long, so i wrote about the Gaia roleplay i'm in. rage_against_the_machine replied... Sept. 1, 2011 at 3:24 pm : Ah, I see.