Se7en

Nice job.

 

Nice job! So few words and yet, such a big impact! Really good poem!

I liked this! It was very simple and meaningful. If I were you, I probably would have added a few more lines to it. But that's up to you. I love the quote on the side, by the way... Hahaa.

I think it should be a little longer so it gives the reader more of an idea about what they're reading.  It has a great start, just needs to be longer.  

I agree with Harebelle, I think this would be nice if it was longer.

Interesting...and creative, but I think it would benefit from being longer. Keep writing!

Nice. I like that it's so short, yet says so much. Maybe a bit more description would have made it more powerful, but I think it still had an impact. :)

I like the simplicity and shortness of this poem.  It gives each individual word its own punch.  That said, I think I do agree with rage_against_the_machine, listing the sins doesn't give me much.  I like what you did with the ending though, it is powerful

Hmm.. I'm not one to judge how someone creatively expresses themselves, and I like the idea of this. But, I'm not really getting anything out of this, I think maybe you should have not named the sins, but rather implied them through description, to add a bit more depth to the poem.