He has poison in his pockets
the devil in his mind.
His bodies full of hate,
his eyes are deeply blind
the devil in his mind.
His bodies full of hate,
his eyes are deeply blind
LT.MckayLove it. Short, catchy, rythemic, and the title just lures me in.
Cheerleading_rules1245I really like this poem but i think it should be a bit longer
Natasha1994i think there is more to it it kinda feels empty but i like it i think it needs more
Blaker
I really like this. It seems to me that it doesn't feel finished. Like there's something missing almost. But otherwise it was great, the first sentence really drew me in.
Lexie96I've got to agree, I like the work, but I feel like you should have added just a bit more onto it. A promising start, though, so keep it up! Check out my work sometime?
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