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Daddy's Womb This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.





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TheUntouchableShadow said...
Feb. 11, 2012 at 2:53 pm:
i like it alot! new favorite
 
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vail09 said...
Feb. 8, 2012 at 1:12 pm:
that was wonderful...may i ask what inspired you?
 
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BraxtonLangstonChapman said...
Feb. 8, 2012 at 12:24 pm:
This is really good and I want to get to this level, can someone judge some of my poetry and tell me something I need to work on.
 
vail09 replied...
Feb. 8, 2012 at 1:14 pm :
ill do it if you wish. before hand i want to say..im not a rude person if i dont like something ill tell it easily
 
mikey'slover23 replied...
Mar. 30, 2012 at 4:29 pm :
that waz a good poem.thanks it helps me out with my listening skills with my daddy xd
 
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NickyJThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 9:08 pm:
We need more poetry like this floating around.
 
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ryanryanryan said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 2:40 pm:
This was exremely well written and had great imagery.
 
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ThinkGeek72 said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 2:40 pm:
Very interesting and different! I loved it!
 
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Alyssa897 said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 2:35 pm:
Great imagry and overall really well writen!
 
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ImCoolerThanYou said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 2:33 pm:
Very very well written. Great imagery and good details. You can see it in your mind.
 
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ryanryanryan said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 2:30 pm:
very well written, has good imagery, amazing flow
 
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Slafyg said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 9:47 am:
Nice imagery
 
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tdotcooley said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 9:39 am:
Very well written and relates to many important realizations in life.
 
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Lillie M. said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 4:30 am:
So amazing! This can relate to a lot of different situations, you've written it so well that people can view it in their own ways.
 
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Blacknblue_kissez said...
Feb. 5, 2012 at 12:06 pm:
This poem is filled with imagery, it's so vivid and beautiful. I can see a warm summers day, and a boy trying to prove his father wrong. I love this.
 
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White_Trash843This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 3, 2012 at 4:18 am:
Great poem i wish i could be as good as you are and congrats on the mag i hope you keep writing!
 
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Labyrinth said...
Jan. 30, 2012 at 2:36 pm:
It is very good. And where do you get off saying it's "DREADFUL"??? I think you have no eye for poetry. V_V
 
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AlexisNicole822 said...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 7:58 pm:
The flow was incredible, and I loved how it gives the reader different ways to view it. Mind blown(:
 
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HisMinx said...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 7:14 pm:
this is amazing!
 
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Jen_Vargas said...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 4:09 pm:
Hm... it was interesting... the ending was a bit confusing though...
 
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