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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.





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daniec said...
Feb. 28, 2011 at 8:05 am:
this poem was confusing in parts but greact overall
 
queentabbiecat99 replied...
Feb. 28, 2011 at 9:03 am :
i think i get it its about how his father holds him back by letting him go foward. he says go try but knowing he will fail. and it also says his father is holding him by a chain.  I LOVE IT REALLY to me it makes since
 
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LeslieAnn said...
Feb. 28, 2011 at 7:53 am:
I like the idea behind this but the rhythm is a little awkward in places.
 
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ahut:) said...
Feb. 27, 2011 at 9:50 pm:

wow,

i love my dad.

i miss him so much

 
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Aderes18This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 27, 2011 at 4:11 pm:
This poem has a lot of interesting emotions in it. 
 
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KristieM said...
Feb. 25, 2011 at 9:40 am:
I really liked this piece of writing. I thought it was very clever and had good wording.
 
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amhotopp said...
Feb. 25, 2011 at 9:36 am:
you are a very good writer!
 
Bren_Bren replied...
Mar. 10, 2011 at 8:10 pm :
I agree because you kept the excitement going and you someone use their imagination too. Great!!
 
Dark_Mind replied...
Mar. 26, 2011 at 11:00 pm :
Loved it alot.! Really good meaning.!
 
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freeo said...
Feb. 25, 2011 at 8:55 am:
The poem was good
 
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Wesley D. said...
Feb. 25, 2011 at 8:45 am:

nice job....

 

 
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the.beast said...
Feb. 24, 2011 at 4:38 pm:
i never had a dad........i want one like this one!
 
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knitwit96 said...
Feb. 24, 2011 at 2:20 pm:
i really like this poem 
 
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Bakerstudent13 said...
Feb. 23, 2011 at 2:41 pm:
That was really good! I wish i had a dad who was cool like yours....?
 
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BigJoe92 said...
Feb. 23, 2011 at 12:06 pm:
I wish I had a cool dad :(
 
Grandma replied...
Feb. 23, 2011 at 2:14 pm :
yea me too :-(
 
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foxbox said...
Feb. 22, 2011 at 10:41 pm:
Cute poem, not my favorite but still enjoyable to read
 
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writer500 said...
Feb. 21, 2011 at 5:57 pm:
Hey Guys! Im posting this here because the largest amount of people will probably view it. So, i want to say please check out some of my work i want to know what you think-thanks!!
 
Annie replied...
Feb. 22, 2011 at 8:07 am :
The comments here are supposed to be on this poem, not to advertise your own work. Also, when I did a search for your screename, you don't even have any work on this website, unless it's anonymous; anyway, my point being-this is not the place to advertise your work.
 
Ayushi_austen replied...
Feb. 25, 2011 at 4:44 am :
my thoughts exactly!!write something commendable(like dis 1 )and then we shall see....
 
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Sarie B. said...
Feb. 19, 2011 at 7:46 pm:
Wow. this is a gr8 poem!! keep it up!!! :)
 
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