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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.





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Popcorngirl said...
Feb. 17, 2011 at 1:26 pm:
It made perfect sense to me... I dunno what you guys are spouting
 
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MusicBunny4595.7This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 17, 2011 at 12:16 pm:
I don'tget it, I mean it makes sense, but it doesn't really have much point.
 
Bubblybubbles223 replied...
Feb. 17, 2011 at 1:18 pm :
I agree. its a pretty good poem but i wish the top voted poem was one that made more sense.
 
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Suzana J. said...
Feb. 16, 2011 at 7:23 pm:
I love how you build up your thoughts throughout the poem
 
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niki94 said...
Feb. 14, 2011 at 12:54 pm:
where you in the tub?
 
Joey replied...
Feb. 14, 2011 at 4:25 pm :
lol. dude, i think he was.
 
searbear180 replied...
Feb. 17, 2011 at 8:52 pm :
No i dont think so. Remember, he said the line about the sea? but maybe...thats a really good poem though
 
Sarie B. replied...
Feb. 19, 2011 at 7:44 pm :
i agree with ya searbear180. i love the poem a lot!
 
evergreen232 replied...
Mar. 7, 2011 at 5:53 pm :
Ummm ohkay isnt that like weird that u 2 have the same name kinda?? wuteves :P i agree
 
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Ezibeltha This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 10, 2011 at 5:48 pm:
Wow, a lot of comments. Pretty much all positive. I like the poem... It's different, it took some time to figure out, but in the end it was confusing, yet intriguing. Oh, and I don't think there any other 'wayyyy better' pieces then this. It's pretty good.
 
Aspiringauhor replied...
Feb. 16, 2011 at 3:21 pm :
I did not post those. I would like to know who did that and why they would do that. I definitely think there are better poems/pieces. I just like this one. So if you're going to steal my identity, at least get the facts right. I will report this if it happens again.
 
Aspiringauhor replied...
Feb. 16, 2011 at 3:25 pm :
I mean it: Who posted those comments? 
 
2Whammy replied...
Mar. 2, 2011 at 3:41 pm :
No, i'm not trying to be mean, but some of it didn't make sense.  It was nice, and the effort you put into it was great, but I guess something just didn't click quite yet.  I was a fairly well done poem done, and I hope something else of yours realy will click. Anyways, keep up the good work.
 
2Whammy replied...
Mar. 2, 2011 at 3:43 pm :

orry, wrong spot, lol.

but anyways, same feelns for it.

 
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Bubblybubbles223 said...
Feb. 10, 2011 at 1:16 pm:
this is kinda dumb, not trying to be mean but there are other pieces wayyyy better and this shouldnt be #1. Thank you.
 
Aspiringauhor replied...
Feb. 12, 2011 at 1:08 pm :
Why say thank you if you've just insulted someone's piece? How does that make sense? It certainly doesn't make up for your lack of politeness in your other part of the comment!
 
Bubblybubbles223 replied...
Feb. 14, 2011 at 4:27 pm :
well this is a dumb poem, seriously, and I can have that opinion if I want to.
 
Aspiringauhor replied...
Feb. 14, 2011 at 4:40 pm :
If you re-read my comment, I never said you couldn't have that opinion. I just said that you weren't very polite in the way you shared your opinion. At least the other people who didn't like it were polite about it.
 
Bubblybubbles223 replied...
Feb. 15, 2011 at 9:11 am :
why do you keep defending this poem????????? seriously everyone who said something bad about it, you have commented back to them defending it. don't you have anything else to do. it's not even yur poem.
 
1EmoKidd1 replied...
Feb. 15, 2011 at 2:46 pm :
This Is A GREAT Poem, What It Means To Me, is Probably Diffrent That Other People, But It Sends A Stron Message. So Stop Hating. Haters Make Us Famous =D
 
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