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Daddy's Womb This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.





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Elle66 said...
Dec. 22, 2010 at 11:25 am:
This was so lovely. i was pulled in as soon as i saw the title. Keep on writing cause your great! :)
 
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bambibelle said...
Dec. 22, 2010 at 12:28 am:
this is truly touching, thank you
 
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Anela5 said...
Dec. 20, 2010 at 8:35 pm:
Beautiful, read the title and was immediately drawn in :)
 
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beangurl:) said...
Dec. 20, 2010 at 5:48 pm:
wow that was beautiful i loved it
 
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vestling92 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 20, 2010 at 1:03 pm:
powerful ending. well done.
 
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WildandFree said...
Dec. 20, 2010 at 12:04 pm:
Parents don't ever wanna let go and this poem says that perfectly
 
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Wolfheart O. said...
Dec. 19, 2010 at 3:50 pm:
Wow...this is beautiful. I feel like I'm on the brink of understanding it...is it like, saying that when you are with your parents you are chained?
 
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smiles365This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 17, 2010 at 9:34 pm:
I love this poem! I read it almost everytime I come on and I understand more and more of it everytime!
 
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JaimeNichole said...
Dec. 17, 2010 at 8:41 pm:
This is absolutely, positively beautiful. The imagery is excellent. Your word choice fits perfectly, and the whole poem flows. I love the message you convey in this. Your point is definitely proven. Please keep it up. Check out some of my work if you have time. 
 
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Janejane said...
Dec. 16, 2010 at 7:05 pm:
Soooo beautiful, my friends and i love it!!!
 
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TimothyH. said...
Dec. 16, 2010 at 6:49 pm:
I like this one
 
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Leann13This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 16, 2010 at 6:14 pm:
I'm so jealous of all your comments:) haha... but you rightfully deserve them! Very nice poem. Amazing symbolisim!
 
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htrae22 said...
Dec. 13, 2010 at 6:19 pm:
I loved your poem i get how dads dont want to let go
 
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peacelovesmiles said...
Dec. 10, 2010 at 6:07 pm:
 feel kinda blonde but i don't get what this poem's about. could someone please explain?? thnx!
 
writingrox2This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Dec. 10, 2010 at 7:19 pm :
ths wuz a rlly good poem but i agree i dont exactly get it at the end
 
Mockbirds_Fly replied...
Dec. 12, 2010 at 2:07 pm :
I think what Carl is saying is really symbolic - the child wanting to swim across the sea, or fly high through the sky; just wanting to be free. But he's chained - imprisoned- where he is, by the one that should love him the most.
 
justsmileanddance replied...
Dec. 12, 2010 at 3:47 pm :
thank you sooo much for explaining!!!
 
Ashleybear replied...
Dec. 14, 2010 at 2:58 pm :
well i feel as though this poem is like how i feel wanting to be free but chaned to the ground wit no escape. this is a very good poem! but why do we have to be chained to the grond. i think mediforitly that w shoud fly as high as the sky and swim acorss the sea. whats stopping us to reach our dreams so go ahead and reach for the sky
 
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dpsh307 said...
Dec. 10, 2010 at 10:45 am:
Wow! This poem is very intriguing.  I do love the idea of the poem. I love the two lines in the second stanza, "i asked my Father if i could fly"(L.2.1) "and he said, sure, Son - go try"(L.2.2) It reminds me of a time when I was a kid and asked my parents about flying. I would like to know how it felt to for you to have the sky at your level.
 
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brodiephillips said...
Dec. 9, 2010 at 5:36 pm:

cute verrrrryyyyy cute

 

 
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