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What I Could Never Tell My Mother MAG
February 1, 2008
What I could never tell my mother
Isn’t her fault; it’s mine
It’s things wrapped inside of me, coiled like wire with the filament exposed
She could accept them – those things – I’m sure
Maybe even love them the way she loves me; little puzzle pieces
That fell out of the box when we were putting it under the sofa
After we almost finished the puzzle together
But I hide them inside my deepest aorta
Keeping them safe because who wants to grab a still-beating heart?
It would kill me to take those secrets out
So my mother may know they exist
But she lets me keep them.
And maybe that’s the real secret, the one that
Shhhh
She doesn’t know –
It’s that I need some secrets of my own.
© Anonymous
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K.K said...
on Mar. 3 2009 at 10:41 pm
hey your poem was very unique and pretty it flowed nicely and it made perfect since your an amazing writer born with true talent congrats for getting it published.
brokenbutterfly SILVER said...
on Mar. 3 2009 at 1:07 am
Wow nice poem. you seem to be really good at writing by the way you use your words. I adore who you put them together
That was very interesting. And aorta was a nice fresh word that I haven't seen in a while. The whole thing gave off a hushed vibe that kept me interested.
Congrats on getting published!
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Congrats on getting published!
If you don't mind, please go read, rate, and comment on my poem. Please!
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BlackDeathxxxiv said...
on Feb. 25 2009 at 8:48 pm
Great!!!! It was reaching out and grabbing me at every turn. Suprub.
I can't think of any other words to discribe it. I loved every minute of it.
I can't think of any other words to discribe it. I loved every minute of it.
Madelyn1231 GOLD said...
on Feb. 16 2009 at 11:11 pm
Very good:] keep writing :]
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im not sure how it works but my name is Madie K. and i have like... 3?...poems on mine so...take a look!
Flux_Day said...
on Feb. 13 2009 at 4:11 pm
Reminds me of faerie tales and the way your mind wonders into letting you think there are other worlds out there...
A No Knee Mouse said...
on Feb. 6 2009 at 12:33 am
This poem sorta relates to what i'm going through right now. Very good! I wish i was that good of a writer...
sahsia102 said...
on Feb. 4 2009 at 5:06 pm
This poem depicts perfectly the sentiments of having a secret you can't express. I love it! Please write more!
Nicovera said...
on Feb. 4 2009 at 12:36 pm
wow. I loved this poem! Especially the reference to puzzle pieces. My mom and I used to put puzzles together all the time! This poem is very clean and to the point, and very origonal.
lollygager101 said...
on Jan. 24 2009 at 2:01 am
Great poem I am glad it was in the magazine!
X0RACHAELX014 said...
on Jan. 14 2009 at 1:26 pm
this is soo cute! its amazing i love every line of it. and ppl can rly relate to it, definatly me at least. but its rly good, great job :)
Flowerchild_711 said...
on Jan. 7 2009 at 1:29 am
This poem was really good.I like the part about secrets being like puzzle pieces because it is sooo true. I like how yu don't tell us what the secret is, because its not really important. Awesome job, wish i could write like this!!!
almost_there said...
on Jan. 4 2009 at 12:38 am
I like this, especially the part about how maybe the real secret is that curious need to protect things/secrets- even if the things themselves aren't that secret or needing to stay hidden, it is that inexplicable need to hide them. You carried that sentiment very well, and I think a lot of people can relate
twilight_girl<3 said...
on Dec. 31 2008 at 4:04 am
this poem is so true and its awsome. nice job.
Redemption65 said...
on Dec. 14 2008 at 2:53 pm
Good. I like how you do not tell the reader what the secret is, but I feel when you got to the climax of your poem your ending was too abrupt. There needed to be more.
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