Broken Perfection

I know this is true. People used to think I was pretty perfect too, until I started being myself. I don't freak out if I only have 5 minutes to get ready or something anymore. I actually wrote a poem very much like this a couple days ago. I'll post if you want. :)

Very nice. Well written with a good meaning. I wish there were more things on here with those two qualities. I kind of laughed a little though because I have blonde hair and blue eyes :)

This is very good! Personally, I would have broken down each line into stanzas, so the rhyming words are more definite. The one stanza I'm not crazy about is "What they don't know is how she came to be this broken bundle of perfection. They don't know how much willpower it took to look like this." Maybe instead write something along the lines of how she is a broken bundle of perfection because she made herself look this way because no one is born a barbie doll. All things considered, this is rea... (more »)

Beautiful, that's all I can say. Delves deeper into the idea of perfection. I love it.