Where the sky ends

I feel as if the way you divide some of your lines - lines two and three and lines ten and eleven  - aren't benefiting your poem; perhaps, you could combine them or reword them or something that feels right to you. I also think you could use punctation throughout your poem, since poetry is a more audible experience I couldn't give you any suggestions because I don't know how you want it to sound. What I did really enjoy about your poem was the question asked in the last two line... (more »)

Very smoothly written, I don't really have any complaints about it.  Good job!