Sunshine in a Cup

I love it!!!!! Your poem's simple phrasing has so much depth to it! I don't think you even needed to explain it to us; I like spending time, wondering, assuming, and  thinking about what the poem means to me! For some reason, this poem made me imagine grandparents sitting, playing cards at a retirement home in Florida, drinking orange juice and sharing happy memories! Strange interpretation, I know, but there seemed to be wisdom and experience, and even longing in this poem. Anyway,... (more »)

I love the analogies. I love the simplicity, but I appreciate your comment to help the reader understand the intentions of the writer. That was a good touch. You could maybe lengthen it a little more or edit it so that you don't need an explanation. But awesome writing. It is very true. I see it as there are moments, happy moments, in life that represent the sunshine. They shine bright and peaceful. They have this atmosphere of purity, of serenity, of love. But then there are also times of death... (more »)

Not bad! It's short and sweet, but still makes you think about the poem and what you are trying to say. I think your comment about the poem oversimplified it, however, but regardless, well done!