Drowning

Thank you!

Thank you! Metaphor poems are enough to make me scream in frustration, thank goodness we're onto descriptive writing in English.

The idea is that the whole poem is supposed to be one long metaphor, comparing the same two things throughout the entire poem. I compared bullying to drowning. One really good example we read in English was: The Poison Tree, by William Blake, which would probably explain the idea of a metaphor poem a whole lot better than my poem. Thank you for commenting!

Longer, you mean? Yeah, I can see that. But I did like how it ended, and I was finding it hard to figure out "what came next", plus I was running out of metaphor. Thanks for commenting!

This poem is a really good metaphor that shows great emotion for the victim. I am slightly fascinated with sharks, so this was a cool poem to read with great idea behind it. I really like you writing style.

Thank you! I was originally thinking that the bullied kid would just quietly slip under the water of bullying, with nobody noticing, but I did like the sharks better. I'm glad someone else likes it too. Thank you for reading my work!