a dress among the thorns, lying
atop the petals, strewn
from cliffs below the sprawling sky
and white under the moon.
atop the petals, strewn
from cliffs below the sprawling sky
and white under the moon.
StarlitSunrise
You were smart not to capitalize anything here. I can tell you paid a lot of attention to your structure.
jetta.ckSimply spectacular! Your word choice, spacing, lines, emphasis, and all of the above were perfect! Your metaphors are strong and you have an impeccable sense of place in your writing, if you know what I mean. Fantastic job.
wanderlustfulI love this. So simple, yet you choose the perfect words to make this very complex and powerful!
Thanks for the feedback, especially on such a short poem:)
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