The Cult

I don't really like this one. It not necessarily because of the message, which I find kinda of negetative, it because it lacks a rythmn. Fr a poem to be a poem.it must have some sor of rythmn and this poem doesn't really have one. I think you should start from square one and make the poem again, this time aliterating more and have a better structure. It over all a good idea for a poem,it just doesn't flow right, Keep writing,