My feet hit the snow as
I walk, the wind blows, homeless
Through trees and my heart
I walk, the wind blows, homeless
Through trees and my heart
This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.
Walking Through the Woods
DeadlyPoppyIt was good, but I don't understand why you don't just eliminate the word as. It is your writing though, and it was a good poem.
not a haiku more a free verse sorry XD but i liked it ^^
soccerchic101010i agree with getting rid of the as :) great poem though!!!
g.a.w. said...
Dec. 28, 2009 at 4:46 pm:
Dec. 28, 2009 at 4:46 pm:
I guess that technically its not a haiku but its wonderful just the same! i love it : )
alex9426
great poem but not a haiku!! it has 5 syllanble on the first line, seven on the second, and five on the last line. not trying to be spiteful, but i'd call this free verse not haiku
ElizabethW.I think it's still okay. Poetry is really subjective today, even haiku. I think the only real requirements are that the top and bottom line are the same and are a few syllables more than the middle.
even if the top and bottom lines were the same in this poem, it's not a haiku. there are just some forms of poetry where the form is unchangeable. haiku and sonnet are examples.
I agree. It's a good poem but should be posted under free verse. I think the point of a Haiku and Sonnet is to be able to express your thoughts within the limitations in a beautiful way and have the reader still be able to understand your meaning. I have also read a lot of Sonnets that are not even close to a proper sonnet and they bother me too, being that they are well written, but not in the right category.
firefly116DeadlyPoppy, if you find a really good and properly written sonnet on this sight please post response to let me know. i can't find any well written limericks in good form either. such a bother :)
very descriptive without being complicated. i really liked the detail about the wind being homeless.
Simple, yet complex. Great Job. Truely Loved it.
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