A world bleak and worn
Sighs heavily before sleep
The wind in autumn
Sighs heavily before sleep
The wind in autumn
immafarmgirlthis piece very much provokes profound thoughts! Loved it! :D
xelawriter97
I LOVED the first two lines. I'm actually imagining the earth exhaling and it's beautiful. Very creative! :)
TheGraeWolfI think the first two lines are great, but the third leaves me hanging. You should add to this; three more lines like the first couple would make this wonderful.
AshTreeI like how you use personification. Haikus are some of my favorite poetry because they are short yet powerful if written correctly.
Phoenix97
First off, beautiful imagery. :) "Bleak" is a descriptive and sadly underused word. I love the first two lines, but the third is just okay. I guess I feel like it doesn't live up to the other two.
booboo360i absolutely love this masterpiece..... it mans so much right now...im glad ive read it....keep writing
Healing_AngelThis is good. Short and sweet. Good job. You should continue this! The last line seems odd and doesn't really fit.
what i got from this poem is that each season brings on different stances for the earth, the most obvious to me was that winter was the time for sleeping. So when the earth was preparing itself for slumber it sighed and created the autumn wind
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