Today I found out
that you existed, I cried
because now you’re gone
that you existed, I cried
because now you’re gone
bigblue
I love this. Its simple, yet elegant. Great haiku :)
Thanks is there anything of yours you'd like me to read?
You're welcome. I would appreciate any and all feedback on any of my works, it doesn't matter which ones
corallee
Absolutely wonderful. Extremely relatable, and powerful word choice.
Thanks, is there anything of yours you'd like me to read/rate/comment?
InkWriter13 said...
Jun. 22, 2012 at 9:12 pm:
Jun. 22, 2012 at 9:12 pm:
Nice use of time words to create the impact of your poem. Very effective. Sad. Relatable. Would you please comment on my poem titled In the Library? It's a ballad.
InkWriter13 said...
Jun. 22, 2012 at 9:12 pm:
Jun. 22, 2012 at 9:12 pm:
Nice use of time words to create the impact of your poem. Very effective. Sad. Relatable. Would you please comment on my poem titled In the Library? It's a ballad.
SpringRayynOh wow, this is really sad. I like the powerfullness in this little haiku. It's just how I veiw somethings too. really good.
dark_armor1crazy how such a short poem can contain so much power. good job!
Behind_a_Plastic_Smilei feel like each wow is jus packed full of emotion and thats exactly wat you have to do-great job
Josika.Navwow! how did you manage to think of this?! it is so simple yet there is a certain depth in it. i love it! great work and keep writing! XD
Thank you! I just read a news article and for some reason I just started to think it!
I agree, there is an amazing depth to sucha short poem!!
eternal_sunshineThis is very interesting! I found myself able to relate in a sense. It reminded me of the tragedies I have heard about that were so depressing, even though I had no previous knowledge about the person. Nice job :)
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