Once upon a time
is how a fantasy starts…
ends with bankrupt dreams.
is how a fantasy starts…
ends with bankrupt dreams.
SaphiraBrightscales
Awesome! It goes like Bam! It's really truly, what I love best about this is your creativity and how the idea is perfect to put into a Haiku cause sometimes Haikus seem so choppy...this is perfect.
Welcome! ...I guess all these "You're Welcome"s must be hectic..haha...but I'm still gonna post'em all,, cause I mean it :D
thatunknownthinghaha. bankrupt! cool.
corallee
Good job. I found your word choice of "bankrupt" to be interesting, and definitely breaks out of the "cliche" idea.
InkWriter13 said...
Jun. 22, 2012 at 9:10 pm:
Jun. 22, 2012 at 9:10 pm:
A beautiful haiku! Perfect, succinct, and totally true. Nice use of words to reveal a insightful thought. Would you please comment on my poem titled Without the Writer? It isn't a haiku, but I would love your feedback... :)
Thanks for reading and I'll check out that poem of yours! xD
SpringRayynThis one isn't as much to my taste as other poems, though it does have the correct number of syllables. A good idea, and true, but it sounds sort of cliché.
dark_armor1haha! i LIKE this one!!!!!!! good job super creative !
Behind_a_Plastic_Smilei really like this and the the twisted ending
Josika.Navlol! i loved it . awesome piece ! keep writing! XD
Kiyoko"bankrupt dreams" is lovely!Concise and to the point. Well done!
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