Report Abuse Home > Poetry > Haiku > Punished Nails Punished Nails By Krasota-Butterflies-and-Angels, Wesley Chapel, FL More by this author Gnawed by your livid teeth-will Heal, so why can’t you? « Previous article More by this author Next article » September & October Join the Discussion This article has 8 comments. Post your own! Report abuse Request to Delete Laugh-it-Out said... today at 7:18 pm: Wow, I was looking at all the comments and was like everyone's so harsh and critical! (Or maybe that's just me). I, however, did not find anything wrong with this except for the fact that it was too good!! I really think that you do capture so much in seventeen syllables. So 5/5 from me :) I'm off to read your other works now....keep rockin --Liv Request to Delete Krasota-Butterflies-and-Angels replied... today at 7:32 pm : Thank you! :D The criticism was well deserved, though XD Not my best piece. Report abuse Request to Delete SwanSong said... Aug. 5 at 7:53 pm: This poem delivers such a strong message for being so short. I don't care for your adjectives as much though. I would suggest using the nail color to symoblize something, maybe "ruby red" for blood, or something along those lines. The word "livid" doesn't really flow, it doesn't really seem like a word to describe teeth either. I can't think of another suggestion for it though. Other than that, I love the impact of the last line. Nice work! Request to Delete Krasota-Butterflies-and-Angels replied... Aug. 6 at 11:24 am : On "emerald nails," I disagree as symbolism for blood was not truly the point of the haiku, healing was. However, I agree with livid. Thank you! :D Report abuse Request to Delete OldYoungOne said... Aug. 5 at 2:11 pm: I agree for haiku there is so little say but it says evrything. This haiku doesn't exactly do that it leaves the reader flat ina way. If nto for you comments on the side about the piece the reader is left with thinking what pain is the speaker reffering to? If it was an extended poem I think you could wonders. Great potential just not the write platform to go off of. Request to Delete Krasota-Butterflies-and-Angels replied... Aug. 5 at 2:29 pm : Fair enough, thank you :D Report abuse Request to Delete poeticlove143 said... Aug. 5 at 2:08 pm: i think there could be more to it Request to Delete Krasota-Butterflies-and-Angels replied... Aug. 5 at 2:30 pm : I agree, I just was tired so I turned it from an extended poem to a haiku since there were lines in the extended poem that I didn't quite like. My bad XD Thanks, though.